Not That Far...
Outside my window is a spider and a tree,
A dirty coloured field,
And abandoned factory.
Beyond the factorys the train,
Which I hear at night,
Along with the rain.
Im really not that far at all,
We're connected by the line,
Thats made of steel and metal
and joins your heart with mine.
2007-02-22 00:27:17 · 12 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Thats really good...I like it a lot
2007-02-22 00:29:59 · answer #1 · answered by ~J*me~ 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I like poems, and yours if great i did not find one complete mistake. IF you continue this on this fabulous line, im sure inlife you'll do such fine. So get off of answers and write some more, about the garden or even the garage floor. I rate this peom a spectacular ten so remember it, from way back then. SO have a good day, keep up the work cause i know you don't want to be a store clerk . . .hehe i thought i'd through something in.
I love the Poem its good!
2007-02-22 00:33:55 · answer #2 · answered by Hi 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is beautifull you should do it 4 a livin YOU ROCK WITH POEMS carry on you are a true poet person!
100000000000000000000000.00+++++++ WOW
2007-02-22 00:33:00 · answer #3 · answered by Lacadema (Role-player) 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it good but you have to keep working in the words n make it little longer :)
2007-02-22 00:35:41 · answer #4 · answered by Janet 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Im gonna keep it real.... it wasent that good you should try aging and keep working on it
2007-02-22 00:30:39 · answer #5 · answered by emilo009 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it. I think that it has a romantic flair to it.
2007-02-22 00:33:05 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
10+++++ very good.
2007-02-22 00:33:01 · answer #7 · answered by Mrs. Shrek 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think thats called plagarism...
2007-02-22 00:30:49 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
nice.. a little outta tune tho..
2007-02-22 00:30:33 · answer #9 · answered by flee1906 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
aw i love it =) really
2007-02-22 00:34:35 · answer #10 · answered by Belosnezhka (aka Gex) 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋