Please give me a literary analysis of the following paper.?

Question

provide ample criticisms and do give examples. thanks

http://www.ubersite.com/m/99016

Answer 1

I hate to say this, but I had a hard time getting beyond the first paragraph. It is a very, very, VERY descriptive paper (dangerously on the edge of wordy). There are several run-on sentances and it makes it just that much more difficult to read.

You have a great sense of similies and metaphors, as you have a keen sense of observation, but you need to tone it down a bit. Instead of coming off as a mature, poetic writer it makes you seem quite young.

Keep on writing!