He looks upon the world uncertain
Drawn behind his bedroom curtain
He plans to venture out today
If those demons stay away
He gets visions in his head
He gets them while he lies in bed
He mumbles out his daily plea
Someone out there, please help me
In his mind he’s all-alone
He been that way, since he has grown
No one really seams to care
Or that feeling, none will share
They say he don’t think the same
It gets him down, it gives him shame
It is not that he is lazy
Loneliness, does drive him crazy
I think the moral of this rhyme
Is he needs help, and he needs time
Just tell him that he has a friend
No matter what, and to the end
2007-02-21 23:43:13 · 16 answers · asked by gary_b04901 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
definitly 10...u should enter it in a poem contest
2007-02-22 00:14:54 · answer #1 · answered by I love when emo boys make out 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey! Well I read your poem and I think it's awesome and I give you a 10 on that. You sound like you really have alot on your mind, I wish I could help you more. ya know we all have things that we would like to talk about but sometimes there is no one to share it with or that can relate to sorta know and understand where were coming from. Well I kid you not, I have been on my own since the age of 9, I have been through many of battles and never backed down from one of them and never will. it took me a long time to get where I am today, I'm not far but I'm still here. I've always wanted to help trouble teens because I was there and done that but I have 2 children with very high special needs and they need me so it's hard for me to get my degree, ya I was on the go all the time as a teen I wasn't one for school. I was pretty pist wondering where my mom went and why me and the other 6 brothers and sisters that I have were all separated, oh dam let me tell you, I don't have to be sitting in an office wearing an expensive suit to help anyone. I have been there and done that and I know what it's like to hurt and you can't learn that no where. So hey if you ever wanna talk look me up and I'll try my best to help in any way that I can.
Take care.
2007-02-22 00:03:21 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Insidious - 7 Paranormal activity 3 - 1 The Woman In Black - 6 The Ring - 5 The ring 2 - 3 The Grudge - 5 Signs - 1 The sixth sense - 1
2016-05-23 22:39:59 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give the poem a 1 rating but you are apparently a very lonley and confused man. If you are who I think you are, then you have very much been loved you just have never been able to receive it to the fullest. You are too busy pushing the people who love you away . That explains why you are like a Hank Williams song. I don't think you need time I think you need to get your s--t together before you totaly lose everyone around you that hes ever loved you. Wake up and smell the roses!!!
2007-02-21 23:51:15 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a great poem! I give it a 9. I have struggled with depression for years and you hit some of the feelings that go along with that right on the head. You have a gift, keep it up! I look forward to reading more of your poems.
2007-02-22 00:02:38 · answer #5 · answered by Felicia 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really like this....you can feel the heart and the pain when you read it.....i feel a plea for acceptance when i read it too.....it feels like you don't feel like you fit in which i almost guarantee keeps for from trying to meet new people.....you can't decide that they don't like you before you even meet them....you want others to give you a chance and like you then you have to give them that chance and not assume that they have already made up their minds.....be more open minded to the possibility that you are a great person and people will love you but they won't think that until you think it about yourself.....don't let the lonliness win...fight back and prove to yourself that you dont have to live that way you can be happy if you want to be.....just push yourself
2007-02-21 23:51:29 · answer #6 · answered by Amy Hizzle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would rate this a definate 10. It's very creative and appears to be sincere and from the heart. Very good poem.
2007-02-21 23:48:00 · answer #7 · answered by michael_trussell 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its great i would give it a 10 and you should enter it into a contest at poetry.com
2007-02-21 23:47:45 · answer #8 · answered by Mary O 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That really is great . I'll be your friend even till the end . I rate that a 10 in my opinion . GREAT JOB !!!!!
2007-02-21 23:48:38 · answer #9 · answered by Me777 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8its not the best poem i've ever read but it comes from the heart and is emotional you shud keep writing!!
2007-02-21 23:53:05 · answer #10 · answered by AD 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋