C.C. lives with her father and her mean stepmother, her mother died when she was really little.
One day on the way home from her aunt’s house C.C.'s stepmother (Niang) tried to strangle her because she slept at her aunts house without permision. C.C. bite Niang to free herself. Niang was furious she told C.C’s father and he said “ How dare you bite your mother she is your niang and you must respect her!!!” Then her father grabed her by her school uniform and threw her out of the house. He told her to never come back.
C.C was all alone on the streets Luckily she bumped into a woman called Grandma Wu who trains children in martial arts and acrobatics. Grandma Wu asked C.C. if she would like to join her martial arts club. C.C. decided since she had nowhere to go it would be a good idea.
2007-02-21 10:22:17 · 6 answers · asked by IDABOSS 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
"C.C. bite Niang to free herself. "
it should be : C.C. bit Niang to free herself.
bit is the past tense of bite and is the correct form in this sentence. Unless I missed something, everything else looks fine.
I just noticed also the word grabbed- you have written grabed- you should double the consonant before adding -ed
it should be : ...her father grabbed her...
2007-02-21 10:30:40 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
C.C. lived with her father and her mean stepmother, her mother died when she was really little.
One day on the way home from her aunt’s house C.C.'s stepmother (Niang) tried to strangle her because C.C slept at her aunt’s house without permission. C.C. bit Niang to free herself. Niang was furious; she told C.C’s father and he said “How dare you bite your mother?! She is your Niang and you must respect her!!!” Then her father grabbed her by her school uniform and threw her out of the house. He told her to never come back.
C.C was all alone on the streets Luckily she bumped into a woman called Grandma Wu who trains children in martial arts and acrobatics. Grandma Wu asked C.C. if she would like to join her martial arts club. C.C. decided since she had nowhere to go it would be a good idea.
2007-02-21 18:43:04 · answer #2 · answered by mliz55 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well there is the bite that should be "bit" in
C.C. bit Niang to free herself...
Also in the second paragraph I would consider using a conjunction after the word streets. Use the word "when" and connect the two thoughts.
C.C was all alone on the streets when luckily she bumped into a woman called Grandma....
and include the word grabbed instead of grabed
2007-02-21 18:36:35 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
her father grabbed her. everything else looks good.
2007-02-21 18:33:08 · answer #4 · answered by ruth4526 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah - the second-person subject pronoun is "you", not "u".
2007-02-21 18:30:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nope thanks for the 2 points
2007-02-21 18:30:41 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋