i have too many if's but's and it just doesn't read like a acadimic, piece work. it's a course on working with children and families and i have to show my understanding of the course readings, and i do , but to read my essay you wouldn't think that, the joinging of topic's is like a car stalling all the time. help!! please
2007-02-21 05:35:29 · 10 answers · asked by lastofthewonderfullpeople 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
useful words in writing an essay -
however
therefore
it would appear
consequently
xxxx
eta. you're nearly there, sounds like you've got the important bit sorted. you could request additional support from your tutor, universities have support available - not sure how the assessment for it works but its worth asking. keep going & good luck x
2007-02-21 05:39:02 · answer #1 · answered by aria 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Having read your question, I think you have a problem ahead! Your sentence construction is intrinsically poor which means it will be difficult to offer advice. Get rid of conjunctions (the 'ands' and 'buts') thus shortening the sentences. Use more particular words. Capital letters at the start of a sentence would be an improvement. Use paragraphs.
Don't write as if you were talking to someone!
That's about the best I can offer given the lack of further information.
2007-02-25 13:25:14 · answer #2 · answered by michael w 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
At most schools, there's a writing or tutoring center to which you can turn for help. In addition, you could always visit the English Department and ask them for some help.
2007-02-21 19:19:41 · answer #3 · answered by msoexpert 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Okay. I always proof read my copy and delete sentences that are repetitive or have to many buts ,ands or ifs.
Even if my paper sounds too academic, that its preferred by your instructor. That is the format they are trying to teach you.
Keep your text book handy and your research in front of you to make sure your format is consistant with that.. : )
2007-02-21 13:59:41 · answer #4 · answered by butrucci 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In your university library there will be many examples of work produced by students like yourself. Have a word with the librarians, they love the opportunity to do something positive to help students (if only students would ASK) and they will be glad to pull out examples for you to look at the style required!
The wordlist given by Aria is one of words to be AVOIDED in student's academic work. They sound like padding, and they are, a point you have demonstrated an awareness of in your comment about 'ifs and buts'.
Recognition of the problem is half the battle - go for it!
2007-02-21 15:52:58 · answer #5 · answered by narkypoon 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
It's hard to know what you are talking about when you don't include any part of the essay.
Can you please provide a sample?
Alternately, you can send a sample to me through this site, and I will try to help you out. I have done a lot of editing and proofing for others, and I may have some ideas to help you out.
Regards,
Bronwen
2007-02-21 13:40:52 · answer #6 · answered by Bronwen 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sign up for a writing course. Your grammar is very poor. Look at the run-on sentence you wrote here.
2007-02-21 13:38:24 · answer #7 · answered by notyou311 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Is there a writing lab in your school where they could review your essay and offer suggestions?
2007-02-21 13:44:21 · answer #8 · answered by Lepke 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
From the way your question is written it is amazing to me that you are a university student. Is english your first language, if so, you are in terrible trouble.
2007-02-21 13:40:42 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Try longer words like however, they make you sound smarter without alot of work.
2007-02-21 13:38:43 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋