Is this is a good story plot?

Question

Hi my name is Tizri. I am considering writing a book titled Luminia. Here is the basic plot, please tell me if you like it or what I can do to make it better!


A rather rebelious girl, Teresa "Tess" is on an "educational vacation" with her mother, Lora, and her brother, Scott, aprox. 2189. In the year 2089, a third wrold war had broken out over the creation of twelve androids. The androids were made by taking tweleve children , who had been selected at birth, at the age of eight and giving them total nerological surgery. Tess acadentally discovers one of the abbandoned stasis pods where one of the droids slept. Upon opening the pod, a girl at around the age of twelve is discovered. She identifies herself as ML-2997 familiar name Luminia. Luminia raises huge conterversy in the science community about wehter or not she is human. Along the way in the story, the find the other pods, Luminia falls in love with another droid. Scientists decide she is not human, kill her and disect her. Thxs

Answer 1

ehh...it sounds pretty good, but is Lumina an antagonist or protagonist. does she become friends with Tess? i'd read it. that is, if they dont kill Tess. i hat that. they allready killed dumbledore :[

Answer 2

Congratulations, I think it is a very interesting plot. :)

The only thing I am having trouble with is Luminia falling in love if she is twelve years old. I think it would lack the poignancy of a mature love, even if she is wise beyond her actual years. If you decide to pursue that plot thread, it might be more interesting if she falls in love with a "real" human.

Some ideas to consider:

Who created the androids, and for what purpose? Could the creators have an ulterior motive? Could the androids?

Will the other androids be friends or enemies of Luminia?

Where are the original families of the androids?

What special features and abilities do the androids have? More important, what are their weaknesses?

Good luck to you and your story, and I hope this helps! :)

Answer 3

Respectfully, you have some interesting ideas, but your structure is stream-of-consciousness. Such as, What happened to Tess? What does Scott have to do with anybody or anything? Try looking at it from the other direction. Luminia is a beautiful name, full of educational/angelic stuff. She has so much to teach us. Build your love story around her and the droid, and combine and expose society's racist and anti-technological tendencies - (He's just a droid) - your droid can emerge as a hero, gain love and acceptance, and live happily ever after. Luminia becomes renown for her wisdom and far-sightedness. - Just a thought.

Answer 4

Putting aside your story itself, any plot line can make a good story. It all depends on the effort you are willing to put into the work itself,and how well you develop the characters.

If the reader can relate to your characters, you've made a good effort. It doesn't matter if your novel is about a futuristic family, or a cave full of gorillas.

Answer 5

Hmm...

I'm sure when you fill it out it will make some more sense, but the end is very poor.

Some revenge on the part of the little droid girl would be nice.

Depends how u see it in your head.

And there the problem lies..

You need to make what you see come across in the words you write.

It's not easy is it?

Good luck.

Answer 6

kind of sounds like battlestar galactica but if you can create solid characters and a great story line from it go for it.

Answer 7

It's cool except for the killing her and disecting her part. That's kinda weird...

Answer 8

yes it is well at least i personally think so i really liked the whole future thing and the third world thing

Answer 9

WOW - excellent story line. Very creative. Well done. Go for it!!

Answer 10

Sounds interesting to me. I would read it. Go for it.