Can you help me provide a better way of wording this sentence?
"A life in which we ignore the cries for help from the struggling and dying is a meaningless life, and in turn no life at all."
Thank you.
2007-02-20 13:00:07 · 27 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
From the struggling and dying a life in which we ignore is a meaningless life and in turn no life at all.
2007-02-20 13:04:06 · answer #1 · answered by dee_ann 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Right now, this sentence doesn't really make sense. Also, if this is part of an essay, try not to include the reader (don't say 'we') -- use passive voice Try not to use the same word repeatedly ('life' especially) -- try rewording it like:
A life spent ignoring the cries for help from the struggling and dying is meaningless to one's ____ (insert certain quality here that proves your point -- I'm assuming that this is either a thesis or topic sentence -- it would help to know what you're writing about).
Good luck and hope this helps!!
2007-02-20 13:11:12 · answer #2 · answered by piecrumz 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
A meaningless life, is a life in which we ignore the cries for help from the struggling and dying with in turn no life at all.
2007-02-20 13:05:39 · answer #3 · answered by Dayna 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Ignoring the cries for help from the struggling and the dying is a meaningless life, and in fact, it is no life at all.
2007-02-20 13:04:31 · answer #4 · answered by stagger_lee1974 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I think all you want to say that a life is meaningless and no life at all when cries for help from the struggling and dying are ignored. (I think maybe you need to give me 10 points now, because no one else is going to read 24 answers before they cast their vote).
2007-02-20 13:20:43 · answer #5 · answered by Steve71 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
A life in which we ignore cries for help from struggling and dying is a meaningless life, and in fact no life at all.
2007-02-20 13:04:56 · answer #6 · answered by aj121994 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
A life is not one in which we ignore the cries for help from the struggling and dying.
2007-02-20 13:03:31 · answer #7 · answered by azi g 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
"A life where we ignore the cries for help of the struggling and dying, is a meaningless life and in turn, no life at all."
I think that the phrase " in turn, no life at all" is pretty vague, so try to maybe say something similar.
2007-02-20 13:04:05 · answer #8 · answered by FaceFullofFashion 6 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Do you have to? That sounds pretty good as is.
Maybe, "If we ignore the cries for help from the struggling and dying we lead a meaningless life, which is, in turn, no life at all."
Go with the original if you can.
2007-02-20 13:05:13 · answer #9 · answered by Lelanophilus 1 · 1⤊ 2⤋
A meaningless life; ignoring the cries for help from the struggling and dying, is no way to live.
Prehaps consider using meritless life for meaningless since it seems more in tune to what you are implying.
2007-02-20 13:05:47 · answer #10 · answered by doogie 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋