is this ok?

Question

ok so in health we have to change the lyrics to a song about hiv/aids/std's.


so i chose walk it out
and i changed it to watch it out

this is my song
and tell me if its ok
tell me the truth


AY!
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out

herpies watch it out
aids now watch it out
hiv watch it out
i say watch it out

now hit the doctor's room
and lay your back low
they gonna check you up
now stop breath and chill
they say you now got aids
now ya'll in trouble OH!
i hate the way i move
and now i hate the truth
now everybody listens
i make the crowd shocked
now gone and watch it out
i see they take my word

now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out
now watch it out

herpies watch it out
aids now watch it out
hiv watch it out
i say watch it out

what do you think?

Answer 1

ITS AWESOME I THINK YOU DEFINITELY HAVE POTENTIAL TO BECOMING A SONG WRITER!!!!

Answer 2

I like it, I think it's good. Nice job! :)

Answer 3

nice..i bet i couldn't even do that...