cna someone proof read this? it is the third par. of my persausive paper?

Question

Second of all, there are a lot of food options people could choose from at fast food restaurants. The menu has choices of unhealthy food. It also contains a choice of good, healthy food. The only problem with the menu is that they have the prices set. The cheaper items are usually the unhealthy foods, and the more expensive foods are the nutritious foods. You still have the option of whichever you want, but if your going to look for good food then you may need to spend a little more money. Like I said earlier, “People know their body and how much it could take.” So if we do not think we could take any more of those French-fries or Chicken nuggets, then try going for the good food instead.

Answer 1

- Remove the comma between "foods" and "and" in the fifth sentence
- Remove the hyphen in "French fries" (or, for a laugh, call them "Freedom Fries"
- Don't capitalize "Chicken"

Otherwise, good job

Answer 2

my corrections are in CAPS.

Second of all, there are a lot of food options people could choose from at fast food restaurants. The menu has MANY choices of unhealthy food, BUT it also can contain a choice of good, AND healthy foods. The only problem with the menu is that they have the prices set. The cheaper items are usually the unhealthy foods, and the more expensive foods are the nutritious foods. You still have the option of whichever you want, but if your going to look for good food then you may need to spend a little more money. Like I said earlier, “People know their body and how much it CAN take.” So if we do not think we could take any more of those French-fries or Chicken nuggets, then try going for the good food instead.

Answer 3

Second of all, at fast food restaurants there are a limited amount of food options available. The menu has plenty of unhealthy food. It also contains a few good, healthy food choices. The main problem with the menu is the difference in the prices of healthy and unhealthy food. The cheaper items are usually the unhealthy foods, and the more expensive foods are the nutritious foods. Many people do not have an option to choose healthier foods because of financial restraints. Healthier options seem to come with a higher price, but may be a better value than the cost of poor health. People need to know their body and realize the choices they have in eating healthy or unhealthy. Everyone needs to consider what's best for their body versus time, money and health, then make informed decisions.


Don't use "You" in a an essay. Speak clearly and concisely, dont repeat what you have already said in different words. Vary the sentences. Be informed of what you are talking about. Majority of people do not know what their body can take is the problem. They eat all the unhealthy choices and then it is too late.

Answer 4

Second , there are a lot of food options that people can choose from at fast food restaurants. The menu gives choices of unhealthy food and healthy food. The only problem with the menu is that they have set prices . The cheaper items are unhealthy foods, and the expensive foods are the healthy foods . You have the option of whichever you want, but if your going to look for healthy food then you may need to spend a little more money. as I said earlier, “People know their body and how much it can take.” If we do not think we could take any more French-fries or Chicken nuggets, then try going for the healthy food instead.

Answer 5

The first sentence, "options" and "choose from" are kind of redundant. You could say there are a lot of food options at fast food restaurants and it would say the same thing. The second and third sentences could be combined into one sentence using a comma and a conjunction, such as "but". In the fourth sentence, you could be more clear in your meaning by saying "is the way that they have the prices set." In the sixth sentence, where it says " if your going to look," the word should be spelled "you're" as it is the contraction of "you are." Just some suggestions, good luck!

Answer 6

get rid of "of all," in the first sentence...

use "can" instead of "could" (choose from)

"The menu offers both healthy and poor food choices."

"The only problem with the menu is that the unhealthy food choices are usually the most affordable." Lose the part about the healthy foods being the most expensive, because it naturally follows from the preceding statement and is therefore redundant.

Lose the sentence beginning with "You still have the option..." It is also redundant.

Never begin a sentence with "Like I said earlier." It's awkward and unnecessary.

"Many people know their bodies and can make informed diet choices."

Lose the last sentence... Redundant and unnecessary.

Here's my rewritten paragraph for your consideration:

"Second, fast food restaurants generally offer a wide variety of food choices, both healthy and less so. It is unfortunate that in many cases, the healthier food choices are also the most expensive; but that seems to be true for most establishments. With the large amount of information regarding healthy eating available through various media outlets, it seems unfair to categorically trash fast food restaurants. Many people know their own bodies and can make informed choices about what to eat."

Answer 7

I would try to put somewhere in there that hence the name "Fast Food" probably means high calorie food. Some establishements are starting to see that people want to make a healty choices and offer salads, low carby's, and fruits. Notice that they are also trying to include heathy choices for kids and their meals by offering them juices and milk instead of pop, fruit cups instead of fries.

Towards the end of your paragraph don't repeat what you said earlier, leave that for the conclusion. And when putting that into you conclusion don't put it in there like that either, reword it. EX. People make choices and those choices effect their own bodies.

I am not too sure what you are trying to persaude either so I hope this helps a little.

Answer 8

Just to proof read:
You still have the option of whichever you want, but if >your< going to look for good food then you may need to spend a little more money.

YOUR is a possessive meaning something belongs to you - it is YOURS

It should be YOU'RE - the contraction meaning YOU ARE

Other than that it looks pretty good.
There is some editing that could be done but you asked for proof reading.

Answer 9

"Spell Check" will resolve your spelling problems. If you do not have it, it can be downloaded as a free download from Spell Check . Proof reading is one of the liberties which those who comment on poems take. One of the best proof readers is activated when you type your poem into Microsoft Word first. Though not foolproof is is a big help. Just copy and paste your poem after it is completed. Another way is to post your poem privately to someone who you can trust, then have them return it to you after it has been proof read. My regards Robert

Answer 10

I would like to add:

"but if your going to look for good food then..."

Correct: but if you are going to look for good food then...

The word your should be spelled you're (or you are).

Also, take the capital "C" off of "Chicken".

This sounds like a persuasive paper to me! :-)