I Wrote a Tale, palse Helpe me toimprove it?

Question

Here:
http://psicobunny.spaces.live.com/blog/cns!D7D30260234C8BDA!320.entry
any coment is weclome, even orhography, as english is not may natal lenguaje.

Answer 1

Your work reminds me of the author, Kurt Vonnegut, and that is a good thing. I have two suggestions for you: (1) Work on improving your use of the English language so that your thoughts can be more clearly expressed, and (2) Read the entire works of Kurt Vonnegut and study his unique style and art of narrative. Taken together, these two steps could turn you into an author of note, perhaps worthy of praise.