who likes this poem
The love we shared can never be.
Why you ask? Because I thought you loved me.
You lied and cheated.
and broke my heart in two.
But you know what.
It doesnt matter because I will never love you.
do you like it?
*my twleve year old daughter just wrote this
2007-02-18 04:37:20 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
***she also wrote this one***
The World Is Going To Hell In A Handbasket
WHAT HAPPENED TO THE WORLD
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WHAT HAPPENED TO THE WORLD ?
IT WAS SUCH A FINE PLACE
FILLED WITH WONDER
WHERE WE ALL LOVED ONE ANOTHER
NOW THE WORLD IS SUCH A BITTER PLACE
WHERE HATE AND DREAD NEVER STOPS
NOW GLOBAL WARMING AND POLLUTION SURROUND US WITH NO ESCAPE
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WHAT HAPPENED TO THE WORLD ?
IT WAS FULL OF PASSION
NOW NUCLEAR BOMBS AND TERROISTS SURROUND US
AMERICA, USED TO STAND UNITED AS ONE
NOW WE STAND APART SEPERATED
SEPERATED BY RUMORS AND LIES
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WHAT HAPPENED TO MAN KIND
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WHAT HAPPENED TO MAN KIND ?
WE WERE SUCH A WONERFUL RACE
NOW WE LET OTHER PEOPLE DEFINE US
2007-02-18 05:00:52 · update #1
OTHER PEOPLE WHO KNOW NOTHING ABOUT US
WE WERE SUCH A WONDERFUL RACE
SURROUNDED BY LOVE AND PASSION
NOW WE LET THESE PEOPLE, OUR NEIGHBOORS AND FRIENDS DEFINE US
THEY DEFINE US BY LIES AND RUMORS
WE WERE SUCH A WONDERFUL HUMAN RACE
NOW ALL WE DO IS LIE AND CHEAT ON ONE ANOTHER
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**sorry i ran out of room on the last one
2007-02-18 05:01:59 · update #2
She is a great writer and I think you are a great mom for encouraging her. Tell her to keep writing and writing and writing and writing....
2007-02-26 02:38:26 · answer #1 · answered by Libby 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very sophisticated for a twelve year old. You should encourage her to pursue this and enter her into some poetry writing contests. There is a book called "Young America Sings" that are poems by young people across the country.
2007-02-26 02:57:13 · answer #2 · answered by Rosebudd 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I believe that one day your daughter will become a poet. For only being twelve that is a pretty good poem. Some adults can't even do that.Tell her to keep up the good work. With a little practice and creative writing skills she will have it made. Good Job!
2007-02-18 04:46:41 · answer #3 · answered by shuggabhugga05 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It has a bit of rhyme and meter to it... it's fairly simple, but not bad for someone as young as your daughter. If she keeps up at writing, she'll grow to be very imaginative and may be able to turn something she likes doing into something she can get paid for doing.
2007-02-18 04:46:45 · answer #4 · answered by bloodline_down 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I admire your daughters writings. Keep encouraging her to write her poems, who knows where it will lead her, and what direction her life will take. Good luck to you both. You are very lucky to have someone so talented.
2007-02-26 02:10:03 · answer #5 · answered by chilly bean 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Those are some cool poems. Your twelve year old daughters very talented! i like the 2nd poem best.
2007-02-25 05:57:28 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
"consistently and ever" “i desire to stay at your element consistently and ever, until eventually the timber all die And the birds not extra can fly. until eventually the Earth breaks in a million/2 And the moon loses its mass. i desire to love you consistently and ever. until eventually the ambience disappears And the universe is obvious. until eventually the flora can cry And the international dries. i desire to hold your hand consistently and ever. until eventually the planets crash And the sunlight gets harm. until eventually the comets have not got any tails And the Earth has not extra soil. i desire to work out your smile consistently and ever. For all eternity, i desire to touch your cheeks. consistently and ever, i desire you next to me once I sleep. i desire to experience your lips against mine consistently and ever.” specific, i did no longer replica this from yet another author, it is mine from inuyasha-fiction. i'm the author of this poem^^ so i did no longer cheat and replica off somebody's artwork^^
2016-09-29 06:52:44 · answer #7 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent. I love em. your daughter has real talent. has your daughter sent the poems in to any competitions? I think she should.
2007-02-26 03:53:07 · answer #8 · answered by julie p 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's not bad.
2007-02-18 04:45:41 · answer #9 · answered by KS 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
gurl u good keep on doin wat u doin and i love your picture
2007-02-25 08:49:08 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋