Could I get an opinion on my poem?

Question

This is a poem I wrote. I wont explain the backstory, I'm hoping it will surfice on its own

Flooding back into my mind
Memories I never wanted to find
Nightmares I tried so hard to forget
Fears so old they no longer upset
Trying to find the words to explain
Someone so young feeling such pain
No reason to see the things that she saw
No reason to know the things at her core
No way to understand the things that she dreamt
But to accept that must be the way she's sent

Lock them back up child and throw away the key
These are images you should never see
Turmoil and torture corrupting your mind
Ideas that will beat you and words that will bind
Run from the images, run from the pains
One day these memories will bring you gains
But for now you're too young to understand what you know
So pick up the pieces of your sanity and go
Run as far and as fast as you can
Forget the dreams that turn you against man

Answer 1

I'd certainly concur with sahil above that it is a wonderful poem and level of protection is fine. Except that it would not be easy if seek opinions. Probably once you should not flash the revised copies. A level of trust is called for but it is true that some folks might poach some jewels!
I can see how you sought and got the fitting words to make it rhyme (scheme: aa-bb-cc etc). That is fine, it requires a level of ingenuity to get the proper words to do that. And that is what I'd suggest you verify and ensure that your intended message is adequately conveyed.
stanza 1. Since you want to rhyme without altering the idea, what about "she bore" instead of "at her core"! bore rhymes with saw and conveys the same idea.Core is a rather strange word when preceded by that pronoun.
stanza 2. first line-can it do without "back"! I like "Ideas that will beat you and words that will bind."
give it a title.
Good poem
Good luck

Answer 2

It's much better than some other poems I've read hear, i give it a 3/5.

Tips
Don't make every line rhyme, that's not necessary
comers and full stops

Answer 3

That's pretty good. I enjoyed reading that. But you might want to copywright something like that before you post it on Yahoo, or anywhere else. You never know, there are some asses out there, who like to steal others work.

Answer 4

wow, thats amazing, i say its a little heavy, but its powerful and full of meaning. I love writing poetry and this is the best i've heard :)

Answer 5

Very, very powerful.