Hate...
The way you left me tore me in two
Now the only thing I feel is how much I hate you
It hurt so bad I couldnt understand...why?
I cant sleep,wont eat, but I guess I dont care anymore
So what is love anyway?
It only brought me suicidal days...
I feel my love melt away
Watch as my heart decays...
I pull the trigger tight
And kiss my life goodnight..
2007-02-17 16:34:03 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
yes... i wrote this....
and no.... im not gay....
>.<
2007-02-17 16:42:12 · update #1
wouldn't have guessed it was a poem if you hadn't told me
2007-02-17 16:37:05 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Work on punctuation. Otherwise, grammar is good.
I don't know what to say, this is a pretty generic poem that any middle/high schooler going through puberty could write. In fact, it IS.
If you want me to be completely honest, I don't think it's any good at all. There is a serious lacking of any sort of.. well, depth. Try some similes or metaphors, or some flowery stuff like that.
I dunno, keep working.
2007-02-18 00:43:11 · answer #2 · answered by neopiancardcaptorirene 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's a very good poem. Good imagery. Great metaphors. Still a little sad...
2007-02-18 00:41:25 · answer #3 · answered by orchid0923 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If it's a reflection of how you are feeling, then it's very sad and you might need some help.
2007-02-18 00:39:05 · answer #4 · answered by Night Wind 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I am sorry you feel so bad but please dont kill yourself, you will find someone that deserves you and will treat you right!!!I have been there my first love ,and I did try and kill myself, I took a lot of valiums didn"t die but I was high for a week! I was sixteen and stupid.
2007-02-18 00:41:13 · answer #5 · answered by single mom 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think that it's a very sad poem. you sound depressed. it's a good poem, but i think you need help.
2007-02-18 00:57:15 · answer #6 · answered by shellbee 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very gut-wrenching and sad. It says a lot.
2007-02-18 00:37:42 · answer #7 · answered by whrldpz 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good...deep...did you write that? If so, congrats, it's really good! =)
2007-02-18 00:40:16 · answer #8 · answered by ღღღ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good...I really like it
2007-02-18 00:39:55 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
sounds like you might be depressed??? over a guy? why??
2007-02-18 00:37:19 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋