Yea yea, another poem!?

Question

Before, I had felt like a little kid whose Candy has been taking away.
I am as delicate as glass.
I am broken easily.
I WAS broken easily.
I felt like I just wanted to give up.
On the outside, I looked happy.
But on the inside, I was crying black tears.
Now, I only cry those happy tears.
Because of you, I never gave up.
You helped me heal.
Please, don't let me be broken again.

Answer 1

Yes indeed it is a nice poem. Give it a title.
Just reflecting you need not revise: candy (small letter)unless meant as proper noun. what about "had" instead of "has"! could do without periods at end of some lines. shedding for crying! I particularly like these lines:

Because of you, I never gave up.
You helped me heal.
Please, don't let me be broken again.

Sweet and humble earnest and touching plea of last line. . . . makes addressee/reader feel like reassuring, "dont worry my dear, I'll never let you!"

Answer 2

I like it....I especially like the term "black tears" it portrays how sad you really were. I have never heard that before. Well written.

Answer 3

hey thats better......I think you are interested in poems vey much!!
Then hear it out-
Under the wide and starry sky,
Dig the grave and let me lie,
glad did I live and gladly die,
and then let me down with the will.......
Its still incomplete.
if liked then expand it.....its quite sad tonning and heart touching.

Answer 4

Very sweet and innocent poem...keep it up..it really shows your real feelings...even i can also relate with it... do keep writing more poems...all the best..!!!