A Beautiful Life
A hint of luxury ,
With a mist of power
A sunshine of happiness ,
With a flow of money
Is a part of a beautiful life .
A gust of dreams ,
With a satisfaction of fulfillment .
A hug of ambition ,
With a touch of stars .
Is a part of a beautiful life .
A knowledge of creativity ,
With a light of art .
A help of hands ,
With a comfort of laziness .
Is a part of a beautiful life .
A boon of machines ,
With a feel of a superpower .
A glint of respect ,
With an epitome of perfection .
Is a part of a beautiful life .
A wind of truth ,
With a day in paradise .
A passion of love ,
With a high of reward .
Is a part of a beautiful life .
A life dreamt by others ,
With a getting of want .
A life envied by others ,
With a pray to god .
Is A Beautiful Life .
2007-02-17 05:27:54 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
You're on the right path to a Beautiful Life, it sounds like. Keep writing!
2007-02-17 08:33:54 · answer #1 · answered by jhr4games 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's gawdy and uncooth.
That's my professional opinion.
Not to tear apart your little world here, but decide what a beautiful life is first before you start professing it to others. Is it natural beauty, like a "sunshine of happiness" or is it a personal beauty, like the "comfort of laziness." It could be both, but then you lose that important little thing called unity, and your poem is talking about two entirely different things, it quite frankly bores me, I don't know if you are overly happy or overly depressed. If it was at least nostalgia I could deal with it, but this is just hallmark all over again. But before you start to cry, listen to me, take every word I say and throw it out the window. You're a beautiful soul if you believe you are, and one day when school children are reading your poems, they'll think about how beautiful life is, and you'll thank every person who ever criticized you with a harsh tongue.
2007-02-17 05:42:15 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Phrases like 'a high of reward' and 'a comfort of laziness' drive me up the frigging wall. It's pretentious, dissonant, and self-conscious.
Back to the writing board.
2007-02-17 07:31:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like it was written by out current heads of "administration".
2007-02-17 06:04:50 · answer #4 · answered by yp_vicki_nashville 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Why is this in philosophy - it should be in literature or religion
2007-02-17 05:38:52 · answer #5 · answered by Freethinking Liberal 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is this your own creation?
2007-02-17 08:58:14 · answer #6 · answered by Lesha a Canadian. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like it.
2007-02-17 07:02:51 · answer #7 · answered by Barbara V 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Again, don't care for it.
2007-02-17 05:36:01 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋