I put my new poem on the fridge with a magnet, but my college buddy who stays over with me sometimes when he's kind of not sober, said this makes him feel ill. He's not gay and he's German.
What do you think about this poem on my fridge?
> steaming boiled oats
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> will he accept them
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> steaming, boiling, burning hot
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> boiled oats in a bowl
2007-02-17 03:58:00 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Cultures & Groups ➔ Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, and Transgender
It's Haiku Form Poetry......I'm practicing.
2007-02-17 04:09:22 · update #1
The 1st line is the Title ......;)
2007-02-17 04:14:51 · update #2
Title; 'Oats often overwhelms Teutonic objections'
To pools of porridge pressurized
With heat and then repeated
in poems. Why fight it?
2007-02-17 04:25:29 · answer #1 · answered by Kedar 7 · 7⤊ 0⤋
OKay, I actually understand where your German buddy is getting at. This will sound unfashionable, but I think words like "steaming", "boiling" & "burning hot" remind Germans of the concentration camp "ovens" used to kill innocent men & women during WW2. Sorry if this is offensive, but that's what I genuinely think is the reason this haiku of yours makes him ill.
2007-02-17 12:26:04 · answer #2 · answered by xander 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good, It just needs some more depth or feeling. Keep practicing, you're getting there. I wonder why I'm hungry for some oatmeal cookies.
2007-02-17 12:20:24 · answer #3 · answered by ron s 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Another thumbs up but what Haiku?
2007-02-18 14:03:31 · answer #4 · answered by gitsliveon24 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
mmmmmm now I am hungry. I would eat your boiled oats anytime!!!!!
EDIT -- Haiku? Doesn't that have 3 lines, not 4? LOL!!!
Second EDIT -- Then it IS haiku!!!! My fault!!!! I didn't realize that haikus had titles!!! Well done!!
2007-02-17 12:08:03 · answer #5 · answered by Tikhacoffee/MisterMoo 6 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Needs a little work
2007-02-17 12:10:51 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very Zen, sweetie - but I'm not sure I don't like Kedar's a little bit more today.
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2007-02-17 13:19:12 · answer #7 · answered by abetterfate 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
You know I like you Gay Lord, but this one leaves me cold.
2007-02-17 12:11:27 · answer #8 · answered by castle h 6 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Perhaps boiled oats make him sick?
2007-02-17 12:18:40 · answer #9 · answered by grumpyfiend 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
If he isn't sober, I can see why he might feel it......its your house not his, and why is he your friend if he doesn't like that ur gay....sounds like he's using you for a place to stay.
2007-02-17 12:26:29 · answer #10 · answered by discouragedmom 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋