there is , in the forest ,
a peice of quarter inch plywood,
sticking out of the ground
about four feet,
thousands of trees come from all around
to mourn there loss
2007-02-17 03:23:28 · 23 answers · asked by black market dentistry 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
In order; No, and yes.
2007-02-17 03:30:36 · answer #1 · answered by wildraft1 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
THAT is good. I don't know what else you have written, but keep doing more. Some very slight changes to improve. Do not use all lower case letters. Use periods it a long run on sentence as you have it written now. Second line should be 'piece' instead of 'peice'. Sixth line should be 'their' instead of 'there'.
Word of warning DO NOT let other people change your style or your works of art.
Keep up the good work and GOOD LUCK!!!
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2007-02-17 03:34:15 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well - it made me chuckle a bit. If you wrote it - and YOU call it a poem - then it's a poem.
If you're turning it in for school - your teacher might say it sucks.
I think it would be a fun lyric with an acoustic guitar backing it up. Keep going. It could be a verse or the chorus!
If you're turning it in for an assignment - there is a misspelling. the last line - "there" should be "their" ..... sorry - I'm an admin. and that stuff just jumps out at me.
2007-02-17 03:31:07 · answer #3 · answered by liddabet 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes; I would consider it a poem, but it's not the best .Tree's mourning plywood really isn't my thing though
2007-02-17 03:27:39 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is good, but it appears to be something missing, something like mourning their loss keeping the branches for new growth or something like that to tie in the ending.
2007-02-17 07:05:13 · answer #5 · answered by myleshunt 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds more like telling part of a story than a poem.
2007-02-17 03:27:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Except for a few spelling mistakes, I think it's a pretty decent piece of poetry. If you wrote this, well done!
2007-02-17 03:32:55 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's beautiful. It seems to have a lot of meaning behind it. the ending is great. yes, ofcourse it is poetry. Poetry in my opinion can be anything you write down creatively.
2007-02-17 03:27:12 · answer #8 · answered by meggy217 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it sucks. It just sounds like you're a tree hugger....that can't write poetry.
2007-02-19 14:11:02 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am not sure it qualifies as poetry but it sure makes a good point.
I am not an english teacher but there should be spelled their
2007-02-17 03:30:00 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
no, I like it...
but the last line should read "to mourn their loss"
it's good.
2007-02-17 03:27:03 · answer #11 · answered by Tiff 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋