Here is how part of it goes.
I cry when I am loosing, I cry when I win.
I cry when I am good, I cry when I am bad.
but most of all, I cry when I cry for the love that(I) or that(we)had. which sounds better, the I or the we?
2007-02-16 21:26:13 · 15 answers · asked by lost angel 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I really appreciate everyone taking the time to give me their imput. I originally wrote it with the I in it and think I am going to keep it that way after getting advice from everyone. Not that the we did not sound good too but the I was my first feeling from my heart.
Here is the original poem.(I am so tired right now so sorry if I misspell something)
I really am not crying that much at all the words just came to me.
I've cried for days, I've cried for weeks. I've cried through out the day, I've cried in my sleep. I cry in the morning, I cry at night. I cry when I give in, I cry when I fight. I cry when I'm loosing, I cry when I win. I cry when I'm happy, I cry when I'm sad.
I cry when I'm good, I cry when I'm bad.
But most of all I cry when I cry for the love that I had. Copy written and I post my poems online. Laurie. Thanks again for all your help. Please feel free to comment here or im me at imbeingfollowedby_amoonshadow@yahoo.com
2007-02-16 22:12:44 · update #1
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2007-02-16 22:22:17 · update #2
I think both sound great, but maybe since you´re talking about yourself in this poem, it would be more suiting to use the " I " instead of the " we ".
But thats just my opinion, im sure whichever one you choose will be just fine. Good luck and have a nice day. :)
2007-02-16 21:30:44 · answer #1 · answered by Jaded 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would say we , because it sounds like your the only one crying over this relationship and although obvious it stresses the point that you are crying over someone else.
I cry when I am loosing,I cry when I do win
I cry while I am good,I cry when i've been bad
But I cry most of all, when I cry for the love we had
thats how i see it but its your poem,I hope you share the final product also try poems.com you can submit your poem for prizes
2007-02-16 21:40:03 · answer #2 · answered by BOBBY 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Im not sure.. you sure do cry .. a lot.. Holy Snikeys Batman! there was 6 count 'em 6 crys in that part by it self..
2007-02-16 21:36:58 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
In that situation it doesn't matter which sounds better. What matters is if it was the love that YOU (I) had or if it was the love that BOTH OF YOU (we) had. It's not supposed to change just to sound good, it's supposed to be what is real to the poet.
2007-02-16 21:30:55 · answer #4 · answered by jacksfullhouse 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Use "I". That way the word "love" in the same line can refer to either a person or the actual emotion.
2007-02-16 21:32:24 · answer #5 · answered by Tut Uncommon 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i wish you do no longer innovations yet I even produce different thoughts too (for the sake of rhythm): I cry once I lose, I cry once I win. I cry whilst i'm stable, I cry whilst i'm undesirable. maximum of all, I cry for the affection we had.
2016-10-02 07:04:03 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Use "I". It sounds like you loved the person and they didnt. I imagine if this person loved you then you wouldnt be writing the poem.
2007-02-16 21:29:54 · answer #7 · answered by Darktania 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I is better because you used I in the other verses as well
2007-02-16 21:29:10 · answer #8 · answered by adriana 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
we or the love that I lost
2007-02-16 21:30:17 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
We. But don't cry anymore. :(
2007-02-16 21:39:59 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋