Is this a good poem to send to a dude if I ever find one who likes me? What's your thought?
amazing in the shower
moist love drops dripping
navigating curves downward
cast my eyes in lust
2007-02-16 04:57:29 · 22 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Cultures & Groups ➔ Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, and Transgender
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2007-02-16 05:02:41 · answer #1 · answered by gitsliveon24 5 · 6⤊ 2⤋
So illustrative and descriptive poem. Nice job and it is better than the one I read some days ago. Kind of like it (but not have feeling for you like someone above said :))
Good job.
2007-02-16 13:32:08 · answer #2 · answered by Henry 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's fine, but you should give it to a boy after you've already been with him in the shower, not to a guy you just met, so write another one so that you can get a guy first. Then after you get him, and his body in the shower give him this one.
2007-02-16 13:04:29 · answer #3 · answered by fergalicious 3 · 4⤊ 1⤋
Well, I don't think this is one of your best efforts. Nice images, but what is a gay lord poem without boiled oats????
And really? Do you have problems finding a guy who likes you?
2007-02-16 16:53:39 · answer #4 · answered by Tikhacoffee/MisterMoo 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very good!
Thoughts:
Cut "cast" and "in" in the last line.
And maybe change "lust" to "enthralled" or "transfixed" (only maybe)
RICARDOPH will end up alone with 16 cats if he keeps that attitude up.
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2007-02-16 13:25:20 · answer #5 · answered by abetterfate 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Fizzy faucets forced feelings
Drained by the mellow light
Right was the time we stood
Boys under the stinging spray
Innocence huddles in puddles, too.
2007-02-16 14:29:09 · answer #6 · answered by Marc Miami 4 · 2⤊ 2⤋
It can be if your only looking for a hookup, but if your looking for real love, I think you'll need to be more in touch with yourself... By the way if that's your pic, your a hot-tie...Jim
2007-02-16 15:39:09 · answer #7 · answered by lakecountry40 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
I think if just alright but don't really like it, to be honest.
2007-02-16 13:41:40 · answer #8 · answered by xander 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think it's a good start, but it needs a little work.
2007-02-16 13:02:30 · answer #9 · answered by Ivy 1 · 4⤊ 1⤋
if they liked you, they would like the poem too
2007-02-16 13:04:06 · answer #10 · answered by Jillary von Hämsterviel™ 7 · 3⤊ 2⤋