The event that changed my life the most was soccer. I am really committed to it and so is my family. When it comes to soccer I am very competitive. I stated showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old, playing in the park with my friend. I beat him, and my talent continued to excel. Whenever I have a soccer game, my mom and dad come to watch. During soccer games, my mom and dad come to watch. During soccer games \, my parents give up their time to bond with me and get to know me better.
Important events that I will always remeber in soccer include beating my friend 3-0 and helping my old school's soccer team beat the opposing team 3-1. This got me a trophy for being the best soccer player in 4th grade.. To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends and dad im the park whenever I have the chance.
Also, can you help get started on my 3rd(ending) paragraph. For example: tell me what to put for my 3rd paragraph and show me a sample paragraph.
2007-02-16 00:45:18 · 9 answers · asked by Right here Right now 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
General advice: Do your own homework, and if you want stuff proofread, you'd be best asking a friend or parent.
And for the sake of saying I helped - You spelt 'remember' wrong in the second paragraph.
2007-02-16 00:48:10 · answer #1 · answered by Aidan J 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The event that changed my life the most was soccer. I am really committed to it and so is my family. When it comes to soccer I am very competitive. I stated showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old, playing in the park with my friend. I beat him, and my talent continued to excel. Whenever I have a soccer game, my mom and dad come to watch. ***TAKE THIS SENTENCE OUT--->** During soccer games, my mom and dad come to watch. ***<---TAKE THIS SENTENCE OUT** During soccer games TAKE THE SLASH OUT --> \<---TAKE THAT SLASH OUT, my parents give up their time to bond with me and get to know me better.
Important events that I will always remeber in soccer INSERT A COMMA HERE include beating my friend 3-0 and helping my old school's soccer team beat the opposing team 3-1. This got me a trophy for being the best soccer player in 4th grade.. To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends and dad im the park whenever I have the chance.
Also, can you help get started on my 3rd(ending) paragraph. For example: tell me what to put for my 3rd paragraph and show me a sample paragraph. NOT SURE ABOUT YOUR THIRD PARAGRAPH, BECAUSE WHAT EXACTLY ARE YOU TRYING TO MAKE AS YOUR POINT FOR THIS MINI ESSAY THING?
2007-02-16 08:52:32 · answer #2 · answered by YinxSphinxmen 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I stated showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old, playing in the park with my friend. I beat him, and my talent continued to excel. Whenever I have a soccer game, my mom and dad come to watch. ***TAKE THIS SENTENCE OUT--->** During soccer games, my mom and dad come to watch. ***<---TAKE THIS SENTENCE OUT** During soccer games TAKE THE SLASH OUT --> \<---TAKE THAT SLASH OUT, my parents give up their time to bond with me and get to know me better.
Important events that I will always remeber in soccer INSERT A COMMA HERE include beating my friend 3-0 and helping my old school's soccer team beat the opposing team 3-1. This got me a trophy for being the best soccer player in 4th grade.. To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends and dad im the park whenever I have the chance.
2007-02-24 06:36:34 · answer #3 · answered by sid 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And when ever I won my talent continued to excel. when ever I have a game my parents comes to watch and gives me their support.
The Important events that i will always remember in soccer is winning . by 3-0. and also helping my school's soccer team .to win by 3-1. I have also received a trophy for being the best soccer player in 4Th grade. and whenever I get the chance I play soccer with my friends and dad so I can improve my skills.
I wish I could but I really don't know nothing about soccer and I wouldn't know what to write. good luck.
2007-02-16 08:57:45 · answer #4 · answered by misty blue 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Be careful, here. A lot of these answers have syntax and grammatical errors. Commas should be put between complete sentences( aftr 'and' or any other conjunction). And, for pete's sake, take a look at your spelling! " I stated showing my talent..."...uh, should be 'started' not stated.
2007-02-24 03:46:52 · answer #5 · answered by Teel H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
paragraph1: stated into started
delete the slash
paragraph2: after grade put 1period
turn im into in
2007-02-24 08:50:26 · answer #6 · answered by Juanita B 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are we doing your homework or something. You should do that yourself.
2007-02-23 22:42:48 · answer #7 · answered by Starlight 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no time someothertime
2007-02-24 03:26:27 · answer #8 · answered by montu 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no do it yourself
2007-02-23 01:43:22 · answer #9 · answered by natalie xJx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋