rewrite my statements please?

Question

can someone help me check the statement, change all the grammactical errors and usage errors, and rewrite a better one for me?

Asian Gangs Were Developed in Chicago's Chinatown during the 1870's followed by the Asian migration in order to escape the ruling under the Ching government. During the 1970's the Vietnam War broke out and huge amounts of Vietnamese refugees migrated to America, which made this became more significant. Many Asians feel overwhelmed, frustrated, depressed, and even angry as they try to adjust to living in the U.S. Many times they don't have enough job skills or English fluency to find steady and meaningful work. These youths felt alienated from their parents, family, schools, and ethnic community. They also felt misunderstood, underappreciated, and felt that they were victims of prejudice and discrimination , so they formed gangs as a way to assert their new sense of individualism and personal independence.

Some gangs may be also associated with larger Asian organized crime groups for crimes such as illegal drug trades, human smuggling, robberies... etc. These criminal activities discouraged tourists and merchants to have connections with Chicago. Since then police departments dedicated to end such crime acts. Regarding intervention and law enforcement, authorities also have been urged to work with the Asian community, not against it. They brought in an important message, that no one will be racially profiled as a gang member. They also enforced severer punishments to local gang members. As a result, Chicago's Chinatown became a safer area.

Answer 1

Asian gangs sprung up in Chicago's Chinatown during the 1870s as a result of increased immigration due to persecution. 100 yeras later, during the conflict in Veitnam, refugees flooded America's shores. This new wave of immigration exacerbated the situation between Chicago law enforcement, and the gangs that had gained in strength.

To understand these gangs, one must understand the perspective of the Asian immigrant. Frustrated with the dilemma of assimilation versus maintenance of cultural heritage, many Asians felt depressed or angry. With no way of expressing these frustrations in addition to lack of English proficiency, these youths alienated themselves from the community and soemtimes, from their own families. The gangs that formed acted as a means to assert their individualism and personal independence.

As the gangs grew in strength, they sometimes attached themselves to local crime syndicates that dealt in drug trades, human smuggling and robberies. Chicago's tourism industry and local businesses suffered. The Chicago Police responded with a renewed spirit of cracking down on organized crime, emphasizing cooperation with the Asian community. At the heart of this spirit was a vow against racial profiling, and more stringent penalties for gang members. As a result, Chicago's Chinatown became a safer area.

I really think your paper is going to be interesting and get a good grade, as long as you have a coherent thesis and topic sentences for each paragraph.

Answer 2

in response to whoever wrote "do your own homework". have you ever written an essay? usually you have someone proofread it and give you their thoughts before you write the final draft. almost every teacher I've ever had has made us peer edit each other's rough drafts.

i won't however rewrite a better one for you because that would be plaguerism, and I think the teacher might recognize when a college student writes something versus someone in middle school (i'm guessing, and apologize if I am wrong).


however I will correct your spelling/grammar, and I'll put suggestions and comments in parentheses throughout:

Asian Gangs were developed in Chicago's Chinatown during the 1870's followed by the Asian migration in order to escape the ruling under the Ching government (this sentence is kind of long and runs on, maybe try to make it two sentences instead). During the 1970's the Vietnam War broke out and huge (huge is a weird word to use to describe an amount of something, huge is more used to describe size, maybe say "great numbers" or "vast numbers" instead of "huge amounts") amounts of Vietnamese refugees migrated to America which made this became more significant. Many Asians feel (you were using past tense and you switch to present tense here, go through and switch everything back to past tense "felt" instead of "feel", because this did happen in the past) overwhelmed, frustrated, depressed, and even angry as they try ("tried" instead of "try") to adjust to living in the U.S. Many times they don't (didn't, you get the idea) have enough job skills or English fluency to find steady and meaningful work. These youths felt alienated from their parents, family, schools, and ethnic community. They also felt misunderstood, underappreciated, and felt that they were victims of prejudice and discrimination , so they formed gangs as a way to assert their new sense of individualism and personal independence.


hope this helped :D

Answer 3

Cite your sources. You are also writing in passive. You make assertions without providing supplementary information to prove your points. Very choppy and condensed. You hopped from the Chinese to Vietnamese. Also, use separate paragraphs to convey different thoughts. Aren't Asian cultures more collectivistic rather than individualistic...if not, name the reasons and how they clash with traditional Asian norms.

Answer 4

the first step is to write down 13. as a fragment of 25., it is basically 13/25 Now we want to multiply the numerator and denominator of the fraction through 1 million to eliminate the decimals : 13/25 = 13/25 x a million/a million = 13/25 Now we basically want to rework this fraction to a percentage : 13/25 = 52% So we've the most suitable answer : 13. is 52% of 25. answer is:B 52%

Answer 5

It sounds fine to me. Remember that a teacher may recognize words that are not your own. Also this could be considered plagerism. But I think that what you wrote was fine, and informative. Good Job!

Answer 6

Cheat on your homework somewhere else