Can someone proof read this please. Any and all feed back would be greatly appreciated.
2007-02-14 12:04:17 · 5 answers · asked by stinuh 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Terms of endearment have never been one of my strong points, so I pride myself on sincerity.
(the only thing changed was the capital e, spelling of storng points and sincerity)
2007-02-14 12:07:36 · answer #1 · answered by DrummerGirl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is better to start with a positive rather than a negative, and to use an active verb.
I take pride in expressing my sincerity rather than in offering terms of endearment.
or better, by seeming more humble:
My [colleagues, family & friends, coworkers] [appreciate, cherish, notice] most my sincerity rather than any terms of endearment I may offer.
When lawyers write legal briefs, they put negative information (that which would hurt their clients) in the middle of paragraphs. One strives not to begin nor to end on a bad note.
Strengths first!
Minimize the use of the verb "to be" and you will have more vivid and potent writing.
Your grammar would be correct if Terms of Endearment were a title (such as the movie). I could see some humor in that sentence if you were to say something like:
I never cared for high brow dramas and I am always quick to give my opinions of them. "Terms of Endearment" has never been one of my strong points, so I pride myself in my sincereity. Is it such a weakness to exlcaim to my friends, "That film was utterly dreadful"?
Speaking of your weaknesses in a witty way can turn them into an advantage. We all have weaknesses, but one's foibles become endearing when they are just one part of a colorful character.
2007-02-14 12:45:51 · answer #2 · answered by Discipulo legis, quis cogitat? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Terms of endearment (no capital) have never been one of my strong points (2 words), although I pride myself on sincerity.
/Sincerity/ is not the best word here. UUuuummmmmm = how about "although I always try to use meaningful language."
2007-02-14 12:10:26 · answer #3 · answered by thisbrit 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Better to say: "Spouting terms of endearment has never come easily for me, so instead I pride myself on my sincerity."
2007-02-14 12:14:26 · answer #4 · answered by legaleagle 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Check your capitalization, spelling and punctuation.
2007-02-14 12:07:37 · answer #5 · answered by Oh, Bama! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋