I am not the rich man who was poor and fought my way to wealth. I wasn't the first in my family to attend college. Love has not transended my soul and caught me on a cloud of bliss... I walk in moderated societies and will never eat the bread of champions. I am common, plain, and subtle. My world will never sparkle when I'm gone no one will write praises of my work. My funeral will not be attended by many nor by few. I am the off white, grey, cool taupe.
Neither thin nor fat. I fit in half the time, other times I am heckled. I smell, I taste, I feel but not like them, not like the shinning saviors with their pedestals and ascension. I am 1 in a million and yet I am not a collective. I am alone in with in my existence and yet many are like me. I will live and die in a box and no one will remember my footsteps.
2007-02-14 04:15:46 · 4 answers · asked by Myself 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Ouch! I like it, however sad. I like the last point especially- "no one will remember my footsteps". (Do a spell check though- shining has one n, transcended has a c....) Remember that although we are faceless to the world, just one in 6 billion, God sees us as precious, even knowing the number of hairs on our head.
2007-02-14 04:35:57 · answer #1 · answered by AMEWzing 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well I think the poem is really nice, and I think it has a lot of deep meaning.Let me try to interpret it a bit. From what read I think the author is trying to say that he/or she is just an ordinary person, nothing done to make them stand out,, they are just average.My favorite part is the ending,it makes the poem's whole mood change.Now it's not about just being average in a good way, it's about a struggle in which the person wants to be remembered, about a person trying to stand out. I love it!!!
2007-02-14 04:56:49 · answer #2 · answered by 916dude 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is really really good- very deep. Were you a little depressed when you wrote it though? Not trying to poke fun or anything, I write my best stories when I am depressed. But you have talent, use it to your advantage!
2007-02-14 04:25:30 · answer #3 · answered by playdoh1986 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
damn!!!! thats deep. you should get it copyrighted some publishers will do it for free u put it in like a book of collective poems. check it out u got serious talent.
*a true artist sees beauty and/ or talent when she spys it; holla*
2007-02-14 04:23:43 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋