Another time another place
Perhaps a different night
What seems so wrong at the moment
May some day be right
Revolving
Like clockwork
Around lifes precious machine
Play the game
Make the scene
To bitter to chew
To sweet to spit out
Savor the moment
Don’t drown it with doubt
Thoughts racing
Dreams escaping
Spinning confusion
Trembling, shaking
Purge the silence
Break the chains
That forever bind
What beauty remains
2007-02-13 20:04:36 · 15 answers · asked by Jenny 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
i like the way you use your form of vocabulary. never i have heard such beautiful and colorful language and the end rhyming you use is very comfortable :) your tone is just about perfect but may be a bit off so work in that ok ? you may be the next Robert frost
2007-02-14 03:26:13 · answer #1 · answered by jarricke 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah.
Very nice. Interesting thoughts.
2007-02-14 04:13:35 · answer #2 · answered by Warren D 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too bitter and too sweet. Yeah, I write too.
2007-02-14 04:35:57 · answer #3 · answered by GARY M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I remember reading this some where else before.
Not the same words but close.
2007-02-14 04:10:33 · answer #4 · answered by popo dean 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is pretty descent maybe a little work in the middle.
2007-02-14 04:14:30 · answer #5 · answered by andrephoenix 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it, it's written very well but the start does seem a bit familiar.
2007-02-14 04:13:59 · answer #6 · answered by Shannyn 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. I think I understand what you mean.
2007-02-14 04:32:54 · answer #7 · answered by lilmeeh008 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This sounds familiar it is good though.
2007-02-14 04:15:48 · answer #8 · answered by crysanialife 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it, its really nice do you write alot of poetry?
2007-02-14 04:07:47 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You high, right?
2007-02-14 04:13:25 · answer #10 · answered by gaban24 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋