I see a bird in the sky
The pretty bird flies so very high
I watch the clouds go by
And I sigh
I have seen this all before
Last night when I walked through my door
It hurt to the core
And I was sore
No more
I used to watch a lot of tv
When I used to be so free
When it was just me
Now there is he
He doesn’t like tv
I want to dance
And take a trip
I want to eat ice cream
And watch it drip
I know this poem really bites
But I had to laugh tonight
Hope you got a kick as well
Please don’t give me too much hell
2007-02-13 18:57:21 · 9 answers · asked by Jenny 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
The poem is a treat. It successfully captures a transitory feeling and a moment in time. I remember having this moment myself once long ago. Thanks.
2007-02-13 19:08:02 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems like you were alittle bored when you wrote this. You seem like you could do much better. The talent is there.
2007-02-13 19:27:30 · answer #2 · answered by toothfairy.2006 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
actually no.
pretty is a banal word
and you have gone rhyme crazt tv, me, free, he, gee whiz - lets open the bucks fizz!
on the merit side it reads as if it came from within you - and is heartfelt. it needs polishing.
2007-02-13 19:22:53 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No it doesn't go anywhere and there's no hidden meanings behind anything.
2007-02-13 19:05:15 · answer #4 · answered by lizko2 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds like something off napoleon dynamite
2007-02-13 19:05:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you are in grammar school I like it. If you are beyond grammar school I don't like it.
2007-02-13 19:07:01 · answer #6 · answered by thefinalresult 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly, depends on how old you are.
2007-02-13 19:14:19 · answer #7 · answered by Orion Quest 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
VERY NICE......SOUNDS LIKE MY 7 YEAR OLD WROTE THAT!!!!(JUST GIVIN YA HELL,LOL)
2007-02-13 19:01:51 · answer #8 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good
2007-02-13 19:01:35 · answer #9 · answered by daddy r 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋