can anyone tell me their opinion on this poem of mine and what would you name it?
The lines of every face tells a story
A story that can string the paths of the mind to the soul within
The eyes that have seen so much entice me to look deeper
To look something else
The dark leathery skin shows the horror of his past
The firm set lips look like they’ve never before bore a smile
His music is his only escape as the sound of his sacred heart fills the air
People gather around
The music touches them all
You can see as tears fill their pale cheeks as they pour out their own sorrow
A muggy sky swirls around them
Music was their escape
Who were they?
Blues singers.
2007-02-13 18:32:39 · 7 answers · asked by madds818 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I really like the answers so far keep them coming!
2007-02-13 19:06:31 · update #1
I like it - it is very deep, emotional, and philosophical. Excellent poem!
By the way, I would not name it Blues Singers because this way it leaves the puzzle till the end, maybe "Escape," but honestly, I'm not really artistic and that might not be good choice either.
2007-02-13 18:38:30 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
The lines of every face tell a story, opens well, good image. I don't want to edit everything, but tighten the images; lose some of the prepositions (paths into the soul). It's a good look into the effects of "his music" and you don't need the question answer to indentify the subject, perhaps, the answer could title the poem.
2007-02-14 02:50:42 · answer #2 · answered by GARY M 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Yes i like it.
I love to name it : The Blues Singers
2007-02-14 02:45:22 · answer #3 · answered by Stella Devi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Skeletons of angel's
2007-02-14 04:07:40 · answer #4 · answered by Jen 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Shades of grey
2007-02-14 02:37:02 · answer #5 · answered by Kitkat 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like it, but It sounds more like an article or story to me, than a poem. As for a name, I would call it "The story behind the face".
2007-02-14 02:36:53 · answer #6 · answered by Speedy 6 · 0⤊ 4⤋
The Singer.
And it's very good
2007-02-14 02:36:41 · answer #7 · answered by Kismitt 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋