Good Lyrics........Bad Lyrics?

Question

Verse I
I never had, anyone to hold
No one girl, to call my own
Always afraid of what people might say
That only forced me to push you away

Prechorus
I waited for the answer, so I could clear my head
But I failed to realize, that God sent you instead

Chorus
You came to me on the wings of an angel
But I was blinded by all of my lies
Now I know that you are my answer
Now I see, that you belong in my life

Verse II
I always thought I would be alone
No one to care for, or to call my own
My doubts and fears, are here no more
You’re the one that my heart longed for

Prechorus again

Chorus

you could listen to the song a http://www.myspace.com/fightingunder Its not the best quality, I just wanted to record it with the guitar part that I came up with for the song.

its called "To Call my own"

Answer 1

Told ya, lose the commas, and then get to writing something I haven't heard 7000000 times. The same goes for the music. And it's nice that you get a lot of praise here - these are random nobodies with no knowledge of music. They will not fork 20 for your CDs. Make original songs, and make them good. This is cool for when you're at a party & want to pick a chick. On a CD, this would be a piece of sh*t.

Answer 2

Decent, if uninspiring. They sound nice, but the subject matter is a bit old.

And, the commas are really distracting and ruin the pace.

I'd say something nice enough in an amateur band, but nothing that's going to get you into the professional industry.

Answer 3

I really like them, I would say they are really good lyrics, all they need is a great sound to go with them, and I could picture myself listening to a great song.

Answer 4

I think those are good lyrics. Very boy-band. Nice, I like

Answer 5

Pretty good

Answer 6

I like it.