do you like this song i wrote??

Question

im sitting in my room again on a Friday night
i feel so alone and cold don’t you see I need you so
the music is blasted and its drowning out my thoughts
the lyrics are consuming me and my hope is lost
and every word you’ve ever said still lingers in my head
and as I lay here I know that I’d be better off dead
-chorus- isn’t it beautiful the way shes laying there
isn’t it wonderful they way she slowly dies
isn’t it just beautiful the death of of an angel
you told her that you loved her
then left her all alone
isn’t it beautiful when an angel dies
and isn’t it just so beautiful when an angel slowly dies

im hiding in the dark wishing you were here
im bleeding on the floor destroying all my fear
and im getting colder now my heartbeats slowing down
the rhythm of the music begins to calm be down
-chorus

the pain is slow but God it kills
my tender heart begins to bleed and im sure im done for now
the shock has left me numb and I tremble to the floor
the wind blows in the window and then my life finally ends
my last breath is carried in the wind my voice never to be heard again
-chorus
look at what you’ve done
you lies they killed an angel
are you proud of what you’ve done
are you proud of what you’ve done
are you proud you killed and angel
yeah you killed an angel

i just wrote this song . it only took like 10 mins.. so its not my best work. but i just want some opinions!! =]

Answer 1

That's deep. Well done.

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Answer 2

I really like it. The chorus is good.

Answer 3

Umm... dark. Wonder what the melody would sound like.

Answer 4

very good, make sure u get your songs copyrighted or something before posting them, it is a very good song and u should get the credit for it