can some one fix this run on sentence please, i can't do it
On September 13,1810 Miguel Hidalgo and a great army started to take over many cities of Mexico to gain freedom. from Dolores, they moved on to Atotonilco, San Miguel el grande (now Allende), Chamucuero, celaya(whee Miguel Hidalgo received the rank of captain general) , Salmanca, Iraput and Silao, until reaching Guanajuato. On July 18 Miguel Hidalgo was executed. Th is my teachers not "run on break own into several sentences" i really dont know how to do that. can some one please correct the mistakes and do what my teacher said(which idont understand) all u have to do is copy and paste it and correct it Please Help
2007-02-13 14:34:38 · 4 answers · asked by Soap 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
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2007-02-13 15:04:13 · update #1
The main thing you need to work on when you break down long sentences is transitions, like first, next, last, then, etc. If you fit these in your paper, it will sound a lot smoother, especially when you list off all of those cities. Here is what I mean:
On September 13, 1810 Miguel Hidalgo and a great army started to take over many Mexican cities to gain freedom. They started in Dolores and then moved on to Atotonilco. After that they went on to San Miguel el Grande (now Allende), Chamucuero, and Celaya (when Miguel Hidalgo received the rank of captain general). Lastly they reached Salmanca, Iraput and Silao, until they finally reached Guanajuato. On July 18 of the next year Miguel Hidalgo was executed.
2007-02-13 14:47:33 · answer #1 · answered by Jen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
On September 13,1810 Miguel Hidalgo and a great army started to take over many cities of Mexico to gain freedom. From Dolores, they moved on to Atotonilco. After that the army continued their death march to San Miguel el grande (now Allende), Chamucuero, Celaya. In Celaya Miguel Hidalgo received the rank of captain general. The army then went farther to Salmanca, Iraput and Silao, until reaching Guanajuato. On July 18 Miguel Hidalgo was executed.
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2007-02-13 14:46:20 · answer #2 · answered by SadSnyder 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The quickest way to find out what Your teacher really wants You to do would be to ask them to show You, wouldn't it?
On September 13th, 1810, Miguel Hidalgo and a great army started to take over many cities of Mexico to gain freedom.
From Delores, They moved on to Atotonilco, San Miguel et
Grande (now Allende), Salmanca, Iraput, and Silao, until reaching Guanajuato.
On July 18th Miguel Hidalgo was executed.
In what year was He executed? Why was He executed? Where was He executed? Who ordered His execution?
2007-02-13 14:52:12 · answer #3 · answered by Ashleigh 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-11-27 21:50:49 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋