so far do you like this ending for my story?

Question

It's for my English class we had to finish the ending for the story.

well here it is

Well after Jimmy arrested Bob this is what happened.

Jimmy takes his friend to the police station and they call the cops in Chicago so they can investigate if his friend is really the one that murdered Mr. Taylor Pennington. Bob had murdered and stole Taylor’s expensive watch that is worth four million dollars.

When Chicago police arrived they checked if this was the guy and it resulted that Bob had killed Mr. Taylor Pennington. Jimmy was upset because one of his friends when he was younger was being convicted for murder and robbery. Bob was convicted for 25 years in prison but, he told Jimmy that once he gets out of jail he was going to go after him and kill him!

that is what I have so far can you give me some more ideas because it has to be a page long

Answer 1

It's okay. One thing that stands out though, is that you switch back and forth between past and present tense. Also, "stole" should be "stolen". Another thing I have to point out is the ending sentence. Though you are trying to add a twist and make it a cliffhanger, I didn't find it very effective. What I would do is end with dialogue. For example: Bob was convicted for 25 year in prison. As he was being hauled away to serve his time, he called back to Jimmy, "Once, I get out, I'm coming after you"