I am in a world that is no longer turning,
I’m that girl still waiting for something
I wonder when I will awake, from this endless dreaming
I hear a voice telling me to stop sleeping
I see myself waiting for something,
Things just can’t be achieved until I stop sleeping
I want to open my eyes to the world that will start spinning
I am in a world that is no longer turning,
I’m that girl who is still waiting for something
2007-02-13 12:33:53 · 14 answers · asked by tenshi 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I feel suffocated and I’m drowning
I’ll touch sky when I spread my wings to fly
I worry about where I can find my lost wings,
Every time I try to fly I lose them again
Out of my sight, forced out of my mind
I cry because I’m drowning in people’s doubt
Caused by my own self doubt
I pretend that I am happy with what I am
When I alone try to understand
I am in a world that is no longer turning
I’m that girl who is still waiting for something
I understand that I’m not perfect,
But no one gives me the chance to try
I say that I don’t care even when I can’t let it go
I dreamed for too long
It’s time to make this real
I’ll try to fly even without my lost wings
I hope, no I WILL succeed because this is no longer a dream
I will make this happen
Just give me
One chance
I am in a world no longer turning
I’m that girl still waiting for something.
Lithium
2007-02-13 12:34:58 · update #1
a teacher made me go to the counselor after she read it
Kinda scary
This poem isn't written in my point of view. The point of view : girl with abusive parents and she lives in a town
No I'm not suicidal in any way shape or form
I don't usually write poetry but I write it when I really feel like writing a particular feeling/image
My inspiration comes from basically anything. (it usually comes when I day dream)
I'm also in a phase where a lot of stuff I write is dark and deep
I guess I'm growing up ^-^
2007-02-13 17:22:25 · update #2
it kind of sounds like a love poem not suicidal though
2007-02-13 12:37:11 · answer #1 · answered by xxmisperfect127xx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate to answer a question with a question but....do you feel gulity about something? Do you not trust yourself? It sounds like your lost more than holding a gun to your own head. If you are? Please don't!!! Life is never changing. You might feel bad to today but the next is always a change if you let it. As I say. Time is more valuable than money. So be careful how you spend it. Don't waste time in hurting yourself. Read a book and learn something. Do something to better yourself. Help somebody nine times out of ten that makes me feel better about myself.
2007-02-13 22:31:18 · answer #2 · answered by Frost bite 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. You do not sound suicidal. The poem is basically a good one, a bit melancholy, but you can easily clean up the rough spots. ( some parts contradict other parts.) It seems to me more a poem of a young woman who is at a crossroads, with some despair but still hope full.
2007-02-13 22:23:20 · answer #3 · answered by bumppo 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To answere your question no you do not sound suicidal
In your last stanza you said you wanted to fly even without your lost wings. Maybe you should get rid of the word lost since we already know you no longer have wings
2007-02-13 22:14:59 · answer #4 · answered by PimpMeister 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. it doesn't sound suicidal. It does sound like you are climbing out of a depression that almost killed you though. But you are making it. You are holding your own, you've accepted it and you at the top looking back. you go you've made it. I'm proud of you.
2007-02-13 21:04:42 · answer #5 · answered by SANDI P 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not at all. To me it just sounds like you are doing some soul-searching and trying to decide what you are going to do to make yourself happy and be your best. I like this poem; I really like your use of language and I encourage you to keep writing! It's great therapy if nothing else. :-)
2007-02-13 22:24:17 · answer #6 · answered by yumyum 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't think it sounds suicidal. I think it sounds like you're calling out for help, that you want a better world...you just don't know how to get it. Personally, I liked your poem...I could've written it about myself.
2007-02-13 20:45:16 · answer #7 · answered by First Lady 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
to be honest you sound like a poett who is mysterious someone who wrights out of beauty and passion who is understood with out being understood
PS dont take it from me though im only 12 (:
2007-02-13 22:10:09 · answer #8 · answered by em 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I realy think that poem is wayyyyyy... out there. I know sometimes you think that life is useless when things don't happen when you want them to, but just be patient ,your day will come!!!!!
2007-02-13 20:40:45 · answer #9 · answered by ladyiwon 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds almost like it's the opposite, you wanna get out and do something. It doesn't give me any idea of death
2007-02-13 20:37:40 · answer #10 · answered by Nathan A 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋