it duzn't have a title i could never think of one.
u left me broken
with my head in my hands
u left me empty & im afraid i dnt understand
wat u've gone and dun y u've left me this way
u left me hanging by a thread
now i dnt even have that much left
u broke me
now i'm shattered glass
i need 2 ger away cuz im sinking fast.
ur gone 4 good and i'm happy now
ive dried my tears
i'll get thru sumhow
u broke my heart & my trust
but im happy now
cuz i kno i nevr needed us
been broken 4 a while
don't want 2 go back
im afraid i'll put my heart out there again
but it'll all b an act
the pain u left me with still a fresh wound
been hurt once
wont make the same mistake twice
was stupid and foolish
to think u actually liked me
still i carry on
plz pretend not 2 c
the tears in my eyes
i refused 2 shed
now flowing freely but never again.
2007-02-13 11:59:45 · 7 answers · asked by iluvdrma 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
has ne one been published or is a publisher? i have 70 some odd poems and would luv to publish an anthology! i also want to know wat u think of this one plz.
Cold,
forbidding,
steely eyes.
Leers
and sneers,
they tell me lies.
hate
and anger
boil within.
he's so steeped
in
Forbidden Sin.
this
is his problem.
he won't ever ask 4 help.
he cries out to me
but i just stare and say,
you did this urself.
P.S. sry bout the spelling on the last one but with the thousand letter count i wasn't sure if i was gonna be able to fit it all.
thanx again! i love having everyone's opinons!!
2007-02-13 13:32:39 · update #1
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2007-02-21 10:27:45 · answer #1 · answered by dolltrashed 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like your poem--it hits home with me. I, too, write poetry, and
many are lamenting lost love, jilted love, misplaced love, and
downright rejection. And, I know, it HURTS bad! Keep writing
down your feelings because it's a form of pain release. Been
there, done that! Remember, after it's written down, then pick
up the pieces and go on with your life. (..things will get better..)
2007-02-13 20:16:19 · answer #2 · answered by SlownEasy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like this very much....
I can feel what you are saying and how you 'feel' about it.
Very well written!
Funny....I can relate to this poem a little too well.....Its kinda scary how well it sums up the feeling.
I love it!
2007-02-13 20:04:11 · answer #3 · answered by blackhorse_81 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem sounds so cool. Make me feel the same way.
2007-02-13 20:08:13 · answer #4 · answered by Clarinda V 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds good, but if you really want more people to understand it, you might want to get a spell check. No offense.
2007-02-13 20:04:04 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is good.
It gives me wood.
It was so deep.
Now I can sleep.
2007-02-13 20:21:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
its a cliche
2007-02-13 20:07:58 · answer #7 · answered by jaz 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋