What to get a girl I like for valentines day (Cont'd)?

Question

So last night I came up with a poem to write in the card I get for her. I think its good, but opinions are always appreciated!! Please read it and let me know what you think.....

I know you may not like valentines day
and wish it didn't exist
but to prove to you that I care about you
I am writing you this

the past few weeks
or month or two
whatever it may be
I learned some stuff
and saw some things
that have really changed me

I'm not trying to commit here
and tell you I'm in "love"
I just want to let you know
I'm here when you need a hug

Its good to have someone who cares for you
who can give you some advice
because I know how it feels to be all alone
and have no one by your side

I really like being with you
because you know how to have fun
your as crazy as me
and know how to party
and that's just number one

Just in case you're wondering
I wrote this all on my own
Because no card in the store
Or song in the world
Can tell you how I feel

Thanks for the help. I did in fact change the end part as you said, and think it works alot better!!

I was just wonderin, what type of card should I put this in. I was thinking a plain one that just has like a heart on the front with a typical valentines day saying like "Be Mine" or something along those lines. Do you think its a NO or a GO? And should I write it in, or try and print it.....I'll admit, I dont have the neatest handwriting in the world ;)

Thanks once again!!~

Answer 1

very good.but you may wanna change the end phrase......just incase you're wondering,i wrote this all on my own, bcause no card in the store or song in the world can express how i feel

Answer 2

Awwwwwwwww I wish a guy would do this for me! :-)

I suggest writing it with your own hands. Handwritten notes are more meaningful than having them typed.

If you can, get a huge poster board or buy those huuuuge cards, and put this poem on there.

And the only thing left I can say is to just check your punctuation marks.

Good luck!

Answer 3

Aww. That's really sweet. It sounds very sincere, and I think she'll like it.

Answer 4

awww that is sweet! you are good! id have it published.