this is my poem if you are good at poetry i would really like to hear some!
Do you enjoy the hills and the trees?
The beautiful views with a warming breeze.
When the leaves swirl round in different places,
While the dust fills out all the odd spaces.
Between the trees to the past,
Who knows what will and won’t last?
Among the meadows there grows a flower,
It is very rare and holds a great power.
Seams of joy grow in the ground,
Finding their way so they will be found.
As we walk through valleys and hills,
Show everyone our wonderful skills.
We show the world the meaning of joy,
You act as though you are a little boy,
Finding all the hidden spots,
Investigating every tiny dot.
Creating a fact that will never be lost,
Such a great thing that it has no cost,
The bonds between family members,
The love that will always be remembered.
2007-02-12 03:18:11 · 11 answers · asked by Pastinie 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I have taught high school English for fifteen years and this is truly one of the loveliest poems I've read in a long time. It speaks to me of the past, especially by your use of "dust filling out all the odd spaces..", of hope "...seams of joy grow in the ground...", of child-like wonder "...a little boy, finding all...every tiny dot.", and the love of family.
It is my honest opinion that this poem is one you should attempt to get published. It is warm and filled with love. We need more of that in literature these days. You have a true gift! Annie
2007-02-12 03:32:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
What a beautiful poem....You have talent! I love reading poems form young artists like you! This is a great forum to try them out! Keep writing!
2007-02-12 11:31:14 · answer #2 · answered by ♥Sparkling♥Jules♥ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow thats a really really nice poem i like it a lot
2007-02-12 11:23:43 · answer #3 · answered by billy lover 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Gold star!
2007-02-12 11:27:33 · answer #4 · answered by Ice Queen 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like it
a few rough spots
2007-02-12 12:08:45 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's wonderful.
2007-02-12 11:41:20 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it's cute.
2007-02-12 11:22:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
perfect
2007-02-12 11:22:25 · answer #8 · answered by linabbell 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, it sucked.
2007-02-12 11:24:15 · answer #9 · answered by elmechino 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I LIKE IT!
2007-02-12 11:20:26 · answer #10 · answered by CrazyGirlinaMessedUpWorld 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋