Hey you was born today,
Consider your self as a happy male
You just two days apart from a Valentine's day
Which tells me a lot -
You're a sl*t.
I still love u no matter what
And I wanted to say my Friend
You're the bestest of all
Whish you a lot of health and wealth
I also wanted to wish a bit
Happiness in you sorrow beat
Joyfull cry in your head
Gladly take all the mental help
2007-02-12 01:32:52 · 11 answers · asked by bad person 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Good poem, albeit a little dis-concerning. You need to work on your grammar, other than that, it's good.
Poetry doesn't have to be "nice" or "beautiful", it's what you feel inside.
Poetry also doesn't have to rhyme, it's words on paper, that lets us see who you are, or how you feel on the inside looking out.
2007-02-12 01:36:21 · answer #1 · answered by lilfireyballofhate 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Call me tasteless or without a sense of humor... but I'm not sure anyone wants to be called a slut on their birthday. Even if it's a joke.
That's like one of those "Haha... that's cute (I hurt inside)" jokes.
Regardless the very fact that you're writing a poem for someone on their birthday is exceptionally sweet and I give you an A+ for that in spite of some of the words.
2007-02-12 01:36:24 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
They often get confused with Hair or Glam Metal They Are NOT!! they are also called Heavy Metal or Metal in general they are NOT They are Hard Rock they wrote some great tunes for their style a bit too commercial for my taste. But they were good Rock song writers. 18 and Life is a great song. Good guitar leads. Good band just too commercial for me.
2016-05-24 00:38:27 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I guess it depends on who it was written for. I wouldn't like it written for me.
Do you understand the rules of grammar? I don't think you can make up your own rules.
How do the last 4 lines even remotely relate??????
Like they say....don't quit your day job.
2007-02-12 01:51:02 · answer #4 · answered by curious 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
hey
It is a poem you wrote and I am sure your friend would love it, as you went to the trouble to write something for him. Well done.
It is hard to put something to paper on how you feel and you have expressed it well. Don't listen to what others say
2007-02-12 01:48:44 · answer #5 · answered by elizabeth a 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
to be honest its dire. made up words and insulting at times. doesnt rhyme or flow. credit for trying but dont give up your day job
2007-02-12 01:37:20 · answer #6 · answered by Daniel_Son_Bonsai 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
here's a hint plagiarize someone else's work. It was was lousy, sorry.
2007-02-12 01:37:07 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not very good
2007-02-12 01:35:18 · answer #8 · answered by The Chief 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
quite crap really but still better than i can do lol
2007-02-12 01:36:25 · answer #9 · answered by Cockney Hustler 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hate to admit it...but you are right ....your name says it all !!
2007-02-12 01:37:12 · answer #10 · answered by ozzy chik... 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋