Has anyone ever told you how beautiful you are?
So beautiful, and here you are with me.
From the very first I noticed, you are God's gift to all of us,
and the holder of a very special key.
Do people try to stop you, so they can say, "I love you"?
You spread love with every step you take.
Has anyone ever mentioned you're a beautiful work of art?
You filled the hollow chambers of my heart.
You mean no one's ever whisphered, "You're nothing less than a miracle"?
Well, "You're nothing less than a miracle to me".
Is it OK to tell you, that just your elegant presence,
makes me want to wrap myself in thee?
2007-02-11 13:27:27 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It was beautiful. You must be enamored of someone. I say it's a 10.
2007-02-11 13:39:19 · answer #1 · answered by Shotsie 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2
2007-02-12 04:23:54 · answer #2 · answered by chris 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
10
2007-02-11 13:37:08 · answer #3 · answered by Holy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
6
2007-02-11 13:35:10 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its nice a 8 i think that the 3rd and 4th paragraphs werent as good, if you refined the poem and left the 4th and 3rd out i woulda given you a 10
it really woulda been a beautifull transition from
Has anyone ever told you how beautiful you are?
So beautiful, and here you are with me.
to
Has anyone ever mentioned you're a beautiful work of art?
You filled the hollow chambers of my heart.
2007-02-11 13:38:49 · answer #5 · answered by cristian_correa@sbcglobal.net 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would give it an 8 out of 10
2007-02-11 13:32:18 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
without examining a line of your poetry i will supply you a 5 for the two. Why? you're able to ask, because of the fact of you commentary on the top."i'm sixteen and purely began to have an activity in poetry." For that on my own you get 5. A 5 for encouragement in retaining up your activity. I understand your first unhappy poem and my purely remark is to spend 20 minutes on it next time. Your 2nd poem is so in many situations written by using human beings of your age, specifically i think on the grounds which you're growing to be up and love is often in the air. The substitute in pace in the final stanza suits nicely. in the third stanza the be conscious "spiels" could be intentional for it skill "attainable glib communicate". then you definately could propose "spells". the two meaning are as you will discover are opposites. Regards poet.
2016-10-01 23:55:38 · answer #7 · answered by scheele 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good, 8 out of 10. but free verse poems are better to write.
2007-02-11 13:36:01 · answer #8 · answered by someone2knoe 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is quite touching. I'd rate it a nice NINE! for the lucky girl on valentine's day. Hope she loves it to the MAX!!! (Iknow I would.)
2007-02-11 14:03:01 · answer #9 · answered by LadyDragonRider 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow that was actually pretty good. I would give it a 8.5 out of ten.
2007-02-11 13:35:02 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋