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As the sun arose I was getting ready to go to school, and getting ready to crash the class with my friends at A.N.S. This all began in the fifth grade; this was one of my worst years at A.N.S. And the reason that it was a bad year for me was because I always got bad grade. My grades were between ten to fifty percent, so this means that my grades were below average.

I remember that besides getting bad grades I also went to Mr. Hammond’s everyday; the reason for my visit at Mr. Hammond’s office was that I always got in trouble. But the thing was that everyday I went to Mr. Hammond’s office I told him a different version of what had happen. But it was basically the same old things I went to the office for, for example the teachers send me there because I didn’t do my homework, others times just because I was not doing what I was expected to do, but they never send me to the office for bothering someone.

Answer 1

As the sun arose...Maybe an adverb there? Like, as the sun slowly but steadily arose...

Another adverb should be there at "I was getting ready to go to school."
How about: Slowly but steadily, the sun arose. With a sigh, I reluctantly prepared for school.

"Crash the class"? How about a different phrase? That's not a very formal way of putting it.

You haven't explained what A.N.S is. Knowing it is a school is not enough.

What about: Slowly but steadily, the sun arose. With a sigh, I reluctantly prepared for A.N.S (explain what it is). I was going to crash (new phrase please) Mrs. Jones's class.

WHAT began in the fifth grade? If it was bad, call it a nightmare.

What about "Unfortunately, my fifth grade year, when this nightmare began, was a horrible year, one of my worst at A.N.S. Why? Because my grades were lower than the mantle. My grades were below average, often in the 10-50% range."

In addition to getting horrible scores, (use some new words for "grades"), I also paid Mr. Hammond (who is Mr. Hammond? Let's call him the principal) daily visits. That was because I often found myself up to my neck in trouble.

Because I was a sneaky person, I never told him the truth. I would always tell him a different version of incidents. My teachers sent me for all kinds of things, like not doing homework or living up to their expectations. Yet never did they send me to Mr. Hammond for bothering someone.

That needs some sort of conclusion. How about: If you haven't already guessed, I felt much more cheerful when the year FINALLY ended.

So we have:

Slowly but steadily, the sun arose. With a sigh, I reluctantly prepared for Arkansas National School. I was going to Mrs. Jones's class.

Unfortunately, my fifth grade year, when this nightmare began, was a horrible year, one of my worst at A.N.S. Why? Because my grades were lower than the mantle. My grades were below average, often in the 10-50% range.

In addition to getting horrible scores, I also paid Mr. Hammond (who is Mr. Hammond? Let's call him the principal) daily visits. That was because I often found myself up to my neck in trouble.

Because I was a sneaky person, I never told him the truth. I would always tell him a different version of incidents. My teachers sent me for all kinds of things, like not doing homework or living up to their expectations. Yet never did they send me to Mr. Hammond for bothering someone. If you haven't already guessed, I felt much more cheerful when the year FINALLY ended.

Answer 2

As the sun rose I was getting ready to go to school and getting ready to crash the class with my friends at A.N.S. This all began in the fifth grade. It was one of my worst years at A.N.S. It was a bad year for me because I always got bad grades. My grades were between ten and fifty percent, so this means my grades were below average.

I remember that besides getting bad grades I also went to Mr. Hammond’s office everyday. I had to go to his office because I always got into trouble. Every day that I went to Mr. Hammond’s office I told him a different version of what had happened, but it was basically the same old thing. For example, the teachers sent me there because I didn’t do my homework, or because I was not doing what I was expected to do, but never for bothering someone.

Answer 3

As the sun arose, I was getting ready to go to school and crash the class with my friends at A. N. S. This all began in the fifth grade. This was one of my worst years at A.N. S. The reason it was a bad year for me was I always had bad grades. My grades were between ten to fifty percent which is way below average.

I remember that besides getting bad grades I also went to Mr. Hammond's every day. The reason for my visit at Mr. Hammond's office was that I was always in trouble. Everyday I went to his office, I told him a different version of what had happened. It was basically the same old things that had me going to the office. For example, the teachers sent me there because I didn't do my homework. Other times, I was sent because I was no doing what I was expected to do. They never sent me to the office for bothering someone.

Answer 4

The sun dawned as I was getting ready to leave for school. I did not look forward to attending class with my friends at A.N.S. because of my scholastic difficulties which began during the fifth grade. During that very disappointing and unpleasant year, my grades dropped to substantially below average, a low point in my education and happiness.

Answer 5

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