ok this girl and i havent been going out for long at all, but i wrote her this poem along with a buncha otha gifts....the poem goes:
every time i look into your eyes,
i feel a passion in my heart that never dies.
and whenever i see you smile,
it makes me want to run a mile.
now you know i feel this way,
so have a happy valentines day.
i wrote this myself and its copywrited, tell me wat u think
2007-02-11 10:45:10 · 11 answers · asked by Pretty Boy 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Holidays ➔ Valentine's Day
I would have to love to get that poem for valentines day. Keep up the writing!
2007-02-14 12:46:21 · answer #1 · answered by figureskaterrr(: 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is written in the Hebrew Talmud, the book where all of the sayings and preaching of Rabbis are conserved over time. It says: "Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man's rib. Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved."
2016-05-23 22:44:45 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
try this 1 on her
The first day I looked into your eyes,
I felt love which was the greatest surprise,
As the days go by,
More sparks will fly,
Our first kiss tells the story of our lives,
Gentle and Passionate as our lips ties,
They formed a seal that will never be broken,
And our love for eachother is our token,
As we cherish every moment together,
We will love eachother forever.
2007-02-11 10:54:14 · answer #3 · answered by Jonathan B 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a great poem if your eight years old and in the third grade. In other words guy, Don't quit your day job.
2007-02-11 11:12:51 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like the part about wanting to run a mile when you see her smile. Does she have bad teeth or something? Why not say "it makes me happy all the while".
2007-02-11 10:56:36 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really great, I would love to get something like that for Valentine's Day!
2007-02-11 10:53:17 · answer #6 · answered by cam - [ily]♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its really corny and it doesn't have to rhyme to be a poem
2007-02-11 10:53:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats cute!!!
2007-02-11 10:49:25 · answer #8 · answered by ? 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's good the rhymes are good but it's not profound enough. deeper is better.
2007-02-11 10:49:12 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it good job i think she will love it
2007-02-11 10:49:24 · answer #10 · answered by luellenstar 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋