is this poem any good???

Question

we had to write poetry in english class, and this is one of the one's i wrote. my class really liked it, but i'm not sure if it's any good. feedback?


B. I. T. C. H.
the letters draw across her arm
flashing red- she raises the blade
she barely flinches as the razor embeds itself into
her pale white skin

W. H. O. R. E.
it’s the only thing that belongs there
marking her identity- anyone could see it but
no one will. she waits for the cool drops of crimson to trickle
onto the fresh page in front of her

F. A. G.
it’s only three letters this time
enough to tell the story of her life-
loser, loserer, loserest. she watches as it spreads
a spot of red staining the timeline

C. R. O. W.
she hears its call. Insistent.
Persistent. “It is time” she hears, and it’s all she needs
she lifts the blade, breathes deeply,
she screams
she wins

we had to write a poem about a dark alley/death, secrets, or peanut butter.

i'm in ninth grade

Answer 1

I think it's very good and that you have a talent for writing which you should pursue. It makes the reader wonder what led the person in the poem to this point. What makes her hate herself so much that she cuts herself. It makes you feel for the girl who is feeling so rotten towards herself. Very well written, invoking feelings and emotions, which I believe is what poetry is meant to do. The only thing I find strange is that PEANUT BUTTER was one of the topics you could write about as well as these other dark subjects. Is the teacher afraid of peanut butter or something? LOL

Answer 2

I, for one, like it! It's original. I've never seen anyone do anything like it before. In your school, they let you write that? It seems like something you'd burst out with at lunch and get a good crowd from, but for an assignment, I wish you luck!

You're good! Keep it up!

Answer 3

It's a good start. It's a bit too full of youthful angst but it addresses meaningful problems. Ultimately, a poem only has to please one person -- the poet. I'm sure it probably was the best in the class. Keep it up.

Answer 4

I thought it was pretty good.............not one to be a bedtime read. I cannot write poetry and I don't usually understand it, but I liked this.

One question though... why is peanut butter included in what your poem had to be about? ;)

Answer 5

This is a good poem but what was the assignment

Answer 6

Interesting........ something to think about.. keep writing and you may make some good money... good luck... i liked it..