is this a good thisis statement?

Question

this is my thesis statment "James Town was an important town in American history. Even though the town failed; America would not have been as successful with out it, because the town showed what we needed to change, to do differently" is there anything i should change or add too it? and does it have an aguent in it?

Answer 1

You have a defensible argument - that the hardship and suffering of the Jamestown settlers was a wake-up call for folks coming after. (By the way, it's Jamestown, not James Town.)

If you want a rewrite, try this:

Jamestown, though a failure, showed future settlers how to adapt to the new world, which contributed to the ultimate success of the United States.

Answer 2

I see a run-on sentence fix it. my suggestion (I have no clue on the topic tho):
"James Town is a remarkable and historical place in American History. This town is famous for showing the way to change, and to be different. Without a doubt America would not have been as successful as they are if it wasn't for James Town."

Answer 3

Its way too long for a thesis statement!
What you have right now, is more of a concluding statement, something you'd use to some up your essay.

I would do something more along the lines of

"James town is an important part of American History, in the idea that it demonstrated through the failure, the need for change."

Then bring up your three ideas. Your thesis is supposed to be simple yet consise.
Thesis Statement should always be one sentence, even using "and" in a thesis statement is bad.
One idea, that's it!