I am in 7th grade:
Leaves dance
To the beat of the wind
Turning circles against the frozen ground
It is a haiku, and in haikus you do not HAVE to have the syllables be 5-7-5.
2007-02-10 04:11:07 · 14 answers · asked by Rachel K 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I don't know what it means.
2007-02-10 04:14:29 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like it. You should keep writing. It's not easy to come up with a good haiku but if you have a yearbook, you should submit it to the people who make it at your school, and they might put it in there.
2007-02-10 12:19:05 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Actually I'm in 7th grade too. I think it's good, but maybe you should make it longer (as a full poem, not a haiku). It definitely makes sense to me though. I like poems about nature, but not as much as poems about life. You should try doing that too, because you're pretty good. I'd buy your poem book.
2007-02-10 12:16:56 · answer #3 · answered by az11moo 1 · 2⤊ 1⤋
I like it. The question you asked was subjective- meaning that anyone is going to have a different opinion, so it's unlikely that you'll get a straight single type of answer from the masses. But personally, I love it. I love it because I can see it. It's very tangible, very visual. Good job!
2007-02-10 12:16:20 · answer #4 · answered by chrisser665 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
the wind does not have a beat (it may have play / force etc)
the bit 'turning circles' does not sound good. if u cant replace the words with an other phrase then i htink its better to write 'turning IN circles'
Leaves dance
With the play of the wind
Sweeping against the frozen ground
2007-02-10 12:18:29 · answer #5 · answered by Lara^mt 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋
it is good and i understand that those poems are difficult 2 write seeing that i had 2 write one! it is better than the one i wrote but its a little confusing!
2007-02-10 12:17:03 · answer #6 · answered by melanie h 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
yeah im i 7 grade too i just had a poem assignment too. nice poem
2007-02-10 13:40:21 · answer #7 · answered by junegirl210 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I enjoyed your poem. Keep writing and stay in touch with what you were created to do!!!
2007-02-10 12:15:36 · answer #8 · answered by warequalspeace 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
the peom is pretty good. i remember doing those in middle school. its good that you involved nature in the poem because that is one characteristic of a hiku.
2007-02-10 12:18:47 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's great, I'm sure it has a lot of meaning for you.
2007-02-10 13:21:32 · answer #10 · answered by sandyfeliz 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love it! Keep up the very good work.It is lovely.
2007-02-10 12:17:38 · answer #11 · answered by bernice l 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋