i love to write and i have started my own story. this is a fantasy story that will involve dragons and a war between two races. can u give suggestions for names? also what do u think of this start?:
A boy yelled out in pain. A bigger, older man held a whip. “You’ll be punished for not obeying me, boy!”
The boy started sobbing. “I’m sorry, father! Please don’t hurt me! I won’t do it again I promise!”
The man sneered. “You better not, boy! Have you learned your lesson?”
The boy nodded. “Yes, father.”
“Good.” The man lashed the boy one last time before spitting on him. He walked out of the room.
The boy sobbed and curled into a ball. It was like this too often. His father hated him for a reason the boy could not completely understand. His mother had died when he was young. His guess was that his father blamed him for her death. He did not know if that was the true reason though. His father took out his anger and resentment for him every night on him for the littlest reasons.
2007-02-09 15:22:02 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
i know this sounds sorta cliche... but i only showed a small bit, the beginning. the rest is actually quite good in my opinion and not as cliche sounding. believe me when i say my idea is completely original.
2007-02-09 15:29:00 · update #1
Mega cliche. Sorry but if I picked up a book from Barnes and Noble and read this, I wouldn't buy the book. (That's how I decide on books I'm thinking of buying, I read a couple of pages, random, to see whether the writer is any good.)
2007-02-09 15:29:54 · answer #1 · answered by Ruby 4ever 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good start, but it's also a rough draft at this point, right? Watch out for "talking" your story to death. A lot of your creativity comes from your subconscious.. and if you talk about the story you want to write too much, you won't have anything to say when it comes time to write. Unfortunately, in the end writing is a solitary exercise, and getting suggestions for names or sharing bits and pieces may be exciting at first, but in the end I've found that it only takes away from the story itself.
Keep the idea simmering for a while in your mind. Think about it often.. and when it gets to the point that you feel like it's gonna explode out of the pot, you know it's time to put pen to paper. Then.. that's where the painful part begins. Write, re-write, again and again. Any successful writer out there knows that the key to perfecting any craft is practice, practice, practice.
Believe me.. I'm with you here. I've been trying for a while to write, and sometimes I'm drawn to the dark side too - talking about writing more than gluing my butt to the seat and just... writing.
2007-02-09 23:39:44 · answer #2 · answered by Boberella 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
A very good start. It makes me want to know more about the character. As for names i would suggest since you have a dragon in your story use Latin or Norman. Since Dragons are magic and Latin is the language of magic. But use your instincts. Good luck to you and hope to read your book someday.
2007-02-10 01:31:19 · answer #3 · answered by revtobadblack 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad - I definitely want to know what happens to the boy, how he escapes his abusive father. Keep writing!
2007-02-09 23:37:28 · answer #4 · answered by §Sally§ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Spectacular and brilliant.
Can I get Best Answer now? :)
2007-02-10 00:25:06 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow. i whant to read the rest! e-mail me more!
i got some good books, too!
2007-02-09 23:27:21 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
no offense but sorta cliche
2007-02-09 23:25:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋