A simple joke incites it again
The twister spins with gusting wind
Lament is voiced to end the pain
But they fall limp under disdain
All efforts shot, the course is clear
It rips and tears as hope runs thin
It wips the fool and all who's near
The fool takes flight and disapears
The standing fight on through the storm
To break the shield of one too scared
The fallen wall reveals the norm
A crying child will start to form
2007-02-09 10:41:26 · 6 answers · asked by invisible 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
wow! thats good
2007-02-09 10:48:56 · answer #1 · answered by I♥pix 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The two points of your poem is understood as:
Stanza 1: A joke stated and misinterpreted, once the attempt to retract was interrupted.
Stanza 2: The retraction was shot down, with the person running away feeling like a clown.
Try writing the third stanza as:
Those left standing weather through the storm
To break the shield of the one torn
The fallen wall reveals the true norm
A crying child standing in it's innocent form
Interpretation is:
Stanza 3: Because the very one who stated this through an innocent joke, is crying in shame to other folks, recognizing the mistake of words that were mentioned, yet reborn again in the humblest formation.
Make sense? You are a truly creative soul. You hold a great amount of talent that is so waiting to be released and slowly but surely, you are getting there. You are learning your style and adhering to strong advice. This is what I derived from your poem, and others might have derived a different meaning, or point, which states, you have that creative thought where no matter who reads it, they have room for their own interpretation. Keep up the good work! Good Luck and be Safe..(smiles)
2007-02-09 19:30:01 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
I'm not always a fan of rhyme but unlike some of the other stuff posted on Answers this poem doesn't entirely suck. Way to not fail! I actually wish it was a little longer; that's a good thing.
2007-02-09 18:50:25 · answer #3 · answered by ourxtrees 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is good, but a little hard for the novice to understand. Keep it simple. If it would not make a good song, maybe you should reconsider and make it easier to understand.
2007-02-09 18:54:05 · answer #4 · answered by billy s 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Did you mean "coast"?
And "whips"?
And "disappears"?
Anyways, I like the poem. I really like some of the words you used. My favorite line is "A simple joke incites it again."
Good job!
-A fellow writer
2007-02-09 18:50:34 · answer #5 · answered by darksideofthemoon 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
its good
2007-02-10 03:05:41 · answer #6 · answered by Emilce 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋