Cutting Contemplations
Deeper and deeper.
The cut does grow.
Faster and fast.
The blood does flow.
As I sit in my room.
Dead bolted with a lock.
The blade in my hand.
Shines up at me and mocks.
Again and again.
I feel the blade bite.
As the blood streams out.
I feel better and know Iâ??ll be alright.
I could end it all.
With just one deed.
But then who would.
Fuel my dire need.
My arm is all bloody.
And covered with slashes.
My armâ??s as pale as a snowflake.
Except for the scarlet which clashes.
A stream, a lake, an ocean.
Of blood so shiny and red.
The blood is almost all gone.
And soon I hope to be dead.
2007-02-09 07:40:18 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
U write good... it seem it came out of ur heart..
But...that's where u r wrong.
U r in a depressive phase of ur life....go and see a doctor NOW...
Remember....DEPRESSION is just a state of the mind.
Heed my advice....
Don't try anything Nonesense.....
Don't feel no one cares.....we do....ask it to all the Yahoo Answerers.....
Still If U want to end ur life then.....
DIe for a Heroic cause....die saving someone.....donete ur functioning organs to someone who needs it.....die for ur friends or country....so that u will be remembered.....
Don't KILL urself like a CoWARD......it's is what i will call a DOG'S DEATH...... r u a street DOG ?...u r a HUMAN BEING with minds and thinking POWER.....
Feeling BLUES ? BLUES time is the BEST time of our LIFE. It helps to bring out INTERNAL POWER from inside us....The thing is that, with this Infinite POWER, what do one do with it.....
If u think it in the CONSTRUCTIVE way then u can use these Feelings in a Super way......don't think it in a DESTRUCTIVE way.
Lots of Scientist ,Discoverers and CREATIVE peoples r recorded. to have outputted their greatert Creations in their BLUE phase of LIFE....Think it in a very CONSTRUCTIVE way.
2007-02-09 08:13:48 · answer #1 · answered by naafraat 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Honestly, I think your poem is really really good. I think you have a talent for writing. I also think you want help. I am sure you feel completely alone right now and like nobody understands you, but there are sooooooo many people out there just like you. Cutting is not that uncommon. Some people cut, some people pull their hair out, some people take drugs, some people drink...........they are all basically the same thing though. They are an escape. A temporary "fix" to a problem. It is actually kind of normal when you are as depressed as you obviously are. There is help out there for you. You just have to keep looking until you find it. Don't give up. You only have one life. Don't waste it.
2007-02-09 15:58:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's cool, but you could use some more descriptions to invoke senses. Smells, sights, touch feelings, sounds, tastes. That kind of stuff. What's the blood smell like? Do you taste metal? What does the blade feel like when it's ripping through the flesh? But it's still very nice. Gives me a chubby.
2007-02-09 15:49:45 · answer #3 · answered by Johnny Afman 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's alright, but nothing special. The message is far from subtle and the metaphors are all pretty basic. Also, you really don't stray from the basic abab rhyme scheme that much. Still, it's not bad. Also, if this is about you and your personal cutter experiences, stop it. Cutting is just the worthless self indulgence of people who don't know what true misery or pain is like.
2007-02-09 15:50:43 · answer #4 · answered by GP1988 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is beautiful, but its serious. You should honestly talk to someone about this problem. I have a psycologist and it really does help to talk to them about your problems... This could take your life and that would be a huge mistake.....Only THIS mistake can't be undone or fixed. I hope everything turns out alright. You have real talent in the poetry department, but the cutting department is the bad part.
2007-02-10 18:51:05 · answer #5 · answered by Isabelle Lightwood 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kind of morbid...Edgar Allen Poe-like. I hope this is just a dark poem and not a description of your self-mutilating behavior.
It's fascinatingly negative and dark. On a scale of 1-10, I give it a 10.
2007-02-09 15:48:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'm no doctor but I think
You need to go and see a shrink
If your life is not so fun
Get off your tail---call 911.
2007-02-09 15:45:12 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is rather disturbing. It's good, I guess, but emo. Do you cut yourself? Maybe you should see someone about that. Depression is serious...
2007-02-09 15:43:18 · answer #8 · answered by Katherine 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's self-indulgent crap with nothing that would appeal to anybody else!
Get a job!
2007-02-09 15:44:30 · answer #9 · answered by interested_party 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
once again, i commend your skills. i had a bunch of poetry i wrote like that last year, but i gave away all the originals.
2007-02-09 15:58:19 · answer #10 · answered by marajader2d2 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋