Here i sit in my cage
no one can hear my silent rage
Seed to my left,water to my right
never seeing the suns radiant light
My master comes so i whistle a tune
but then he goes, far to soon
When he leaves he outs the light
but i look foreward to the lonley night
I dream of flying over a grassy plain
then up into a cloud of rain
I dream of flying over the emrald sea
i see my kin and they sing with glee
I soar higher up into the sky
a sight so beutiful i begin to cry
But then my master comes to my side
so i must end my joyous ride
So hear i sit in my cage
no one can hear my silent rage
2007-02-09 04:36:24 · 9 answers · asked by buster_medow 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Did you really make that up??!! There are some words spelled incorrectly. Why didn't you use spell check????
I think it is a great poem. It is so good I asked if you wrote it......I loved it. If you did write it, you should repair it and show it to someone that knows poetry.....
MIZ TERI: You do not allow email...Your answer was so funny I am still laughing....Very Good....!!!
2007-02-09 10:44:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
You work in an office, right? In one of those god-awful cubicles? Well, the poem is okay, and it's a good idea to have a vivid imagination, especially if you plan to stay in the cage.
2007-02-09 14:17:21 · answer #2 · answered by Miz Teri 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Iwould say that this poem is not bad. You've got simple, but good rhythm. If you work on it a bit more, It'll become much better.
2007-02-09 13:03:29 · answer #3 · answered by LAZY_STAY_IN_BED 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the rhymes are too simple. it's like reading the cat in the hat, which was a great children's book but not really earth-shattering poetry.
2007-02-09 12:45:24 · answer #4 · answered by craminator 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No, you can't have my opinions on the poem you wrote!
2007-02-09 12:41:47 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats a very cool poem you wrote keep it up!!! lol
2007-02-09 13:18:33 · answer #6 · answered by Marlen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a really nice poem. You are insightful and very creative. :)
2007-02-09 12:48:55 · answer #7 · answered by Butterfly Kisses ♥ 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
hmm its sweet n simple.........actually i like the rythm n beat coz its all in a flow
2007-02-09 14:00:19 · answer #8 · answered by crazyash 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its awesome!!It shows how sensitive & caring u are
2007-02-09 12:47:04 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋