Poem....Honest opinions, please. What do you think?

Question

The Professor

His body dances in the sunlight
While his heart remains hidden in the shadows
He preaches freely of emotion
While never allowing the sermon to penetrate his surface.
He sails calmly through life using knowledge as his weapon;
Experience as his shield.
He fights away the enemy called Desire with intelligence;
Longing with awareness; Love with resistance.
He remains guarded behind his cloak of wisdom
(Ah, for he who knows is not required to feel...)
***
We, the unknowing pupils watch him.
Some with contempt and frustration;
Some with longing and desire;
Some with tenderness and affection;
Some merely in awe.
Condescendingly, we embrace that which we do not understand
(Intent upon bringing him over into our world)
We pull, we tug, we bend, we shape and mold...
But to no avail.

For he is the professor.
We are merely students.

Scolded by defeat, we file back into our appointed places
And let the instruction continue...

I used the word "condescendingly" because I felt like the student thought she was better than the professor because she actually "feels" things, rather than teaching them. (You know...the "Those who can, do. Those who can't, teach." philosophy. Thanks for bringing that up, though!

Answer 1

It's good, but, the word condescending? That means patronizing, displaying a superior attitude. It doesn't fit with what you are saying...if the pupils are unknowing, they can't be condescending.
Otherwise, its good. Sort of reads like a love poem....the student loves the professor.........you might try resolute in place of condescending.

Answer 2

The ideas are there, you need, however, to work on word sounds to make your poem more musical. For example, T.S. Eliot's poems not only is filled with ideas, but it's almost like a musical compostion.

Answer 3

Very deep and yet passionate I say, try to publish in a book of poetry! Good Luck and keep writing your thoughts....

Answer 4

it s more prose than poetry isnt it? im not current on the forms, but I don't see which classical form it might be. Know its not iambic. nice thoughts though, i get the concept.

Answer 5

i like it. It speaks to unrequited teacher love,which I think we've all experienced!
By the way, i like your use of parentheses.

Answer 6

I think your poem is very well written and thought out. It's very good!

Answer 7

It's alright, I would say keep trying...You lost me in there somewhere, but overall.....Good Effort...

Answer 8

i think that it is very good so keep writing . good luck.