13 colonies... again...?

Question

okay... so I only have a few hours before this paper is due, and I am STUCK! the main question is:

"how did the thirteen diverse British colonies in North America come together to form a common identity that facilitated a revolution? In other words, what factors contributed to the creation of a common identity that facilitated a revolution".

I have to include 7-9 of these 9 factors:
--shared english identity
--enlightenment
--quest of religious authority
--trade/rising consumerism
--colonial acceptance of slavery
--french and indian war "7 year war"
--shared inferiority complex
--tighter restrictions from british
--patriotic rhetoric

I have half of it finished, and I was wondering if anyone would consider reading it and telling me what I should add or take away... it only has to be a page and a half, and I have a page on only three topics... I NEED HELP FINISHING AND EDITTING THIS! I AM DESPERATE!

if you wouldn't mind chatting with me about it, I have aim:

itoshii naraku

the three I have already used are

--enlightenment
--religious authority
--shared english identity

the other ones I would like to use would be all of them except maybe

--shared inferiority complex
--trade/rising consumerism

...and I am having trouble with transitions between each topic/factor... PLEASE HELP!

heres what I have:

The American Revolution refers to the period during the last half of the 18th century in which the Thirteen Colonies that became the United States of America gained independence from the British Empire. The English wanted freedom from Arbitrary power, which made them form the common law which enforced the protection from the king so that he could not infringe upon their rights. Although the colonists wanted to be free from British rule, they were all British colonies with similar states of mind, same national characteristics, and they shared specific rights. Not only did the colonists share the same English Identity, but they also shared in the acceptance of religious difference.
This toleration of religious difference started with a rise in secularism, which then led to a separation of church and state. Deism, which was supported by many men interested in science and scientific methods, denied the existence of miracles and the need for providential involvement.

This enlightenment was not the only instance of religious modification. The Great Awakening also caused new religious development. Starting in the Northern states of Pennsylvania and New Jersey, preachers of the Great Awakening, like George Whitfield, preached sermons on how the unredeemed would perish, and that all that was needed to be saved was knowledge of the Bible and a holy experience. There was also a new belief in progress and perfectibility. A new “Desire to discover causality and principles that govern nature, man, and society”(lecture). And so religion was not only changing into a more secular view, but the intellectual output shifted to relying on reason rather than divine intervention. After moving away from the British view of religion, the colonies revised their system of trade.

The colonists believed in the system of slave trade because it was part of the reason the economy was thriving. They needed the slaves to work on plantations, especially since the price on wheat had went up, so that the colonies could trade with the mother country, which at the time was importing over half of the wheat. Slavery allowed for the colonies to make a hefty profit since owning slaves was so inexpensive. In 1739 a major step in promoting fear within the white planters, a group of around 100 slaves revolted along the Stono River, killing several planters. This revolt, known as the Stono Rebellion, was ended quickly and with all of the rebels losing their lives, but they did succeed in striking fear into the plantation owners. Not to long afterwards in 1754, the French and Indian war, also known as the “7 year war” began.

With the end of this war in 1763, not only did the colonists gain military experience, but with the defeat of the French, Britain expanded its territory. This also allowed Britain to tighten control, resulting in many improper actions to tax the colonists such as the Sugar act, Stamp act, Declaratory act, Townshend act, and many others. Needless to say, the colonists were not impressed with the way they were being treated, so to prove their discontent, they rebelled with protests, boycotts, acts of aggression, and eventually declaring independence. The patriotism for this was sparked by Thomas Paine and his patriotic rhetoric Common Sense which stated that there should be no king.

The Second Continental Congress was the national government established as a result of the failure of King George III to respond favorably to the First Congress "Declaration of Rights and Grievances" that was sent to the king protesting the "Intolerable Acts," as they were called by the Americans, passed by the British Parliament.

o... you are grading for a college freshman.

Answer 1

You have nine factors. Write a paragraph on seven of them. Don't worry about transitions yet. Then write an introduction and a conclusion. That's nine paragraphs, easily a page and a half. THEN post the whole thing on Answers and let us edit it for you.

Answer 2

what grade level writing are we editing for?