I am in 8th grade and I need to finish my acoustic poem on peace.
Peace is
Everyone working together to
Achieve a
Common goal where
Everyone is united.
It seems like I am repeating "working together" when I say "everyone is united".
How can I fix this?
Rate my poem from 1-10.(considering I am in 8th grade)
2007-02-08 12:44:34 · 7 answers · asked by Vickash D 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
explain acoustic poem. I am trying to think of something to replace united but don't know the requirements. I like the poem it has a nice rythym and is simple. Check out a thesaurus for a different word.
2007-02-08 12:48:44 · answer #1 · answered by lynnabugg 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Many areas of this appear as if tries to electrify some form of detrimental reaction from an Atheist, as you seem flawed on many factors. Poems are maximum suitable used as a motor vehicle for transcending language. in case you elect to start a non secular debate, write an essay.
2016-11-02 22:45:34 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. Working together and united isn't necessarily the same thing. 9
2007-02-08 12:47:33 · answer #3 · answered by Nico 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Peace is
Humanity working as one
Achieving
common goals
As a team united?
2007-02-08 12:48:16 · answer #4 · answered by Tek ~aka~Legs! 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
u made that up?
7
2007-02-08 12:51:34 · answer #5 · answered by ☠Rockerchick☠ 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
wow thats a good poem. i like it. 10
2007-02-08 12:48:23 · answer #6 · answered by Katelyn 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
last sentence:everybody.
7.5
PINK DRAGON.
2007-02-08 12:58:22 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋