I like the way he laughs. Whenever he does laugh, it sends a shiver down my spine, and makes me think about him for a good fifteen minutes. I like the way his Adam’s apple is so pronounced, and the way it bobs up and down with his laughter. I like the way he lets rude comments roll off his back, like rain washing down the street, or tears rolling down a cheek. I love his smartness, the way that he doesn't care what people think if knows all the right answers, and even when he does get an answer wrong, he laughs at himself. I love how deep his voice is, like dark chocolate. Dark, rich, and very smooth. His voice enraptures you, enfolds you in warmth, and feels like rain drumming down your body. I love his eyes, dark brown, questioning, looking like two burning pieces of coal. I love the way they glisten in the light as he looks up at the heavens. To reduce that down, I love him.
2007-02-08 12:43:49 · 7 answers · asked by Karyn E 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It has no title, so if you could help me with that I would greatly appreciate it=) THANKS!!
2007-02-08 12:44:38 · update #1
love it. u could name it
I Like
My Man
I Love Him
Shiver
Love
2007-02-08 13:31:23 · answer #1 · answered by Stephen'sGirl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To me, the mention of rain and tears give a connotation of sad, loss, grief, so you might like to think about those metaphors. Drumming rain on the body doesn't make me feel warm. The dark chocolate is good. Just a thought, but you may want to move some sentences around to make it flow a little smoother.
2007-02-08 15:08:26 · answer #2 · answered by PAT 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is just my opinion which might not really matter to you. But I think that you use the word 'laugh' or any other modification of it too often. If you want to use repetition, you should spread it around, not clump it up in one section. But other than that I think that the poem is great! Good job!
2007-02-08 13:36:22 · answer #3 · answered by Violet 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds good to me...title it My Man
2007-02-08 13:18:30 · answer #4 · answered by jeeccentricx2 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's great mayb u should tell this sum1 does he feel the same way u feel about him?i think u should title it The things i like bout u?no...........mayb It's him whom i love
2007-02-08 12:59:12 · answer #5 · answered by ARM 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your poem is really nice..it shows what u all feel for him.. so why dont u give it a title called...."THAT'S HOW I FEEL FOR YOU...!!" howz dat...???
2007-02-08 16:41:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good
2007-02-08 12:50:49 · answer #7 · answered by korean_girl101 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋