Roses are red Violets are great but your the only one right for me
2007-02-08 08:52:07 · 22 answers · asked by Carl K 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Holidays ➔ Valentine's Day
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2007-02-08 10:18:00 · answer #1 · answered by Monkey 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offense, but the delivery is a little cheesy as well as not too original. If you're dead-set on that particular rhyme, then here's my suggestion which you may use as you wish...
Roses are red, Violets are great
If I didn't have you, my heart would surely break.
Without any adieu, without further words spoken
My life without you Violet, is world only broken
Remember, deep meaning and originality go a long way. I hope this helps...
2007-02-08 16:58:36 · answer #2 · answered by Dante 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's sweet that you're putting effort into writing something for your girlfriend, but you may want to consider rewording your poem.
First of all, you wouldn't say "your" , you would say you're, as in you are
also, if you're going to use the common roses are red format, the last line usually rhymes with the description of violets. a (really cheesey, but you get the point) example would be:
roses are red
violets are great
you're just right for me
and so fun to date.
whatever you end up doing, good luck!
2007-02-08 16:58:34 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You need to atleast make it rhyme, and if you're gonna do the old "roses are red, violets are blue" bit, make it extra cheesy like you're being cheesy on purpose so it's cute and not, well, "cheesy"
Maybe... "Roses are red, Violet is you and you're the only one for whom my heart beats true."
"Roses are red, violets are great, and I would love to take you on a date."
"Roses are red, Violet is you. I may not be shakespeare but it's the best I could do."
2007-02-08 17:00:03 · answer #4 · answered by skyzmer86 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Leave out the word "right" and you may have something there.
Roses are Red, Violets are Blue, The only Violet I need is You.
2007-02-08 16:55:02 · answer #5 · answered by Phoenix, Wise Guru 7 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Why did you change blue to great if it still doesn't rhyme? That's the only issue I have. How about:
Roses are beautiful,
Violets are too,
I would like very much,
To be only with you.
2007-02-08 16:57:15 · answer #6 · answered by Ryoko M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry, but it has to rhyme. That's just the way that poem works.
what about,
Roses are red,
violets are great
you are the only girl i want to date?, or mate... or keep your last line and do violets are dreamy? Steamy? there are plenty of rhyming possibilities just brain storm
2007-02-08 16:57:49 · answer #7 · answered by perpetual_filth 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Roses are red, Violets are blue.
But the Violet I love, is definitely you.
Yours good, it came from your heart and it's your own words. That's all that matters---I mean, all love poems are cheesy.
2007-02-08 16:56:16 · answer #8 · answered by Dana 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Um..it doesnt even ryhm. Try poetry, seriosly, it works, and READ it to her, dont ler her read it, also get her a bear and some chocolates!! Good luck!
2007-02-08 16:55:57 · answer #9 · answered by Health nut/Extremley Active 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cute to try and work her name into it.
"Roses are red
Violets are pretty
But of all the Violets
You're the one for me."
2007-02-08 16:55:32 · answer #10 · answered by GreenEyedLilo 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's great...if you're 9. :)
Roses are red
Violets are blue
The only one
for me is you.
At least it rhymes. LOL
2007-02-08 16:55:33 · answer #11 · answered by Meg M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋